Students should not be exposed to teacher's opinions on social and political issues in class.
Some people argue that being exposed to professor's certain viewpoint is not bad for students. However, in my opinion, this perspective is not true for two following reasons which I am going to elaborate. One reason is that students nowadays are so busy with their studying. So/Therefore, they do not have enough time to listen to professor's personal opinion. Another reason is that by listening to teacher's idea, it is possible for students to be affected negatively have negative effect.
To begin with, listening to social issues in a school course is waste of time for students. To explain, nNowadays, students always have to compete to get higher grades and outdo others. As far as their academic achievement is concerned, students have to listen only about text book knowledge in their class. For example, when I was in high school, my teacher always was late for school. What was worse was that he told his political views every day in class. However, since I had was a passive personality, I could not do anything in this situation. Inevitably, I decided to go to another high school which was more recognized for outstanding teachers. With competent teachers who always talked about knowledge such as economics, I was able to enjoy studying and my grades could get back on track. Come to think of it, it became a turning point in my life.
On top of that, if a teacher haves wrong values, it will create a confusion in student's values. To be specific, students always gain indirect experience from their teachers. It is as important as actual experience. By listening to their teacher's viewpoint, they will make/form their personality. Thus, being exposed to certain political view in class can not cannot be helpful for students. A survey was conducted by UCLA's research department. The survey participants were composed of one hundred of students at Kang-Nam High School. They were asked if they agree with the idea that a teacher's personal opinion about social issues can affect one's personality and perspective. The result showed that 78% of the participants answered that they are in favor of the idea. Also they said that even if it seemed wrong and unjust, we always were affected by teacher's opinion unintentionally. The only remaining 22% said that it could not affect them me. The survey confirms that teacher's opinion, if it is wrong, can give have harmful influence to students. In this world we live in, it is fairly obvious that teachers should not talk about his personal political opinion to students.
On the whole, I believe I accurately demonstrated my point of view on this matter with two concrete reasons and evidences. To sum up, teachers always must tell knowledge that is related to the exam for students and teacher's personal opinion can influence excessively to students. In this regard, being exposed to teacher's specific opinion is not good for students.
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