■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic :
In
order to be well-informed, people should get information from many different
news sources. Do you agree or disagree?
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▶ Your Answer :
In
modern society, being well-informed is a necessary qualification for any
successful person. It is difficult to fathom what others think, but my opinion
in regard to the given topic is adamant. I believe that getting information
from various news sources is crucial to be well-informed for the following reasons
which I will explore further in the essay.
First
of all, people can gain well-balanced views by looking into diverse sources. These
days, people are immersed with tons of information. If they do not try to
acquire knowledge from many different sources, they can be easily become
biased. Therefore, in order to be well-informed, people should search
information from diverse sources so that they can attain well-balanced and
unbiased views. My personal experience can be illustrated to prove this point.
When I was in university, I had to do some research about the advantage of
social networking services. At first, I only searched for the information on personal
online blogs. However, my professor found out that my research contained some biased
information about the topic, and I realized that it was because the contents I
found were (주어 동사 불일치) conveyed with the author’s viewpoint. Thus, I started to look into
various sources such as internet news and professional magazines and eventually
got a satisfying grade. If it had not been for searching information from
diverse sources, I would not have been able to make such (관사 필요 없습니다) well-balanced
research.
In
addition, people can understand the information much more deeply. To have a
thorough understanding of a topic, it is necessary to find abundant resources.
To be specific, finding information from many different sources clearly shows
outstanding effectiveness in gaining profound insights and outlooks of certain
topic. A research conducted by a renowned professor, Oliver Davidson, indicated
that when doing research, students who searched for information from more different
sources showed more thorough understanding of the topic, and even achieved
higher grades. He also mentioned that the majority of students with high grades
utilized various sources such as encyclopedia, thesis, internet news and
magazines. They answered they benefited from searching various sources because
they could check every detail (every + 단수명사 형태입니다) and not miss important points. As seen from his research it is evident that getting information from many different sources
helps (주어 동사 불일치) people (목적어 필요합니다) to be well-informed.
As
explicitly and logically elaborated above, I agree with the statement that
people should get information from many different news sources, firmly
believing that it will be a great means for gaining information they need. With
the information from diverse sources, they will be able to gain well-balanced
views and understand the information more thoroughly.
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2. 사소한 문법 오류가 잦은 편입니다. proof-reading을 꼼꼼하게 해주세요.
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사례도 적절하게 잘 쓰였습니다.