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The professor casts doubt on the reading passage's idea that sulfur dioxide contaminates the environment. (여기에 연결부사가 있었으면 더좋았겠다라는 생각이들어요~) The professor asserts that sulfur dioxide not only is (not only (근데 not only 위치가 여기인데... 뒤에 또 not 때문에 헷갈리네요.. not harmful to the environment but also it is beneficial to the environment.
The professor argues that smog that sulfur dioxide creates has advantage for the surroundings. According to the reading passage, (쉼표꼭써주세요) smog from sulfur dioxide triggers several problems such as blocking airplane so (so는 써주지마세요 웬만하면 문장앞에서 쓸수있는 접속사를써주세요.) it impairs public health and economy. In the antithesis, smog could function as a obstacle of solar light so it can evoke the global warming diminished. Furthermore, the barrier could balance the damage from the global warming. (이렇게 쓰시면 reading 의 내용이 더 길어진듯한 느낌이 많이들어요. 통합형에서는 리딩의 내용보다 렉쳐의 내용을 더 많이 원합니다.왜냐하면 리딩은 써져있지만 렉처는 들어야하니까요. 이점 명심해주세요)
On top of that, the professor claims that sulfur dioxide is not related to the disease about breathing. The reading passage contends that heavy particle from sulfur dioxide aggravates the human breathing system. On the contrary, the professor says that illnesses related to the breathing system were found before sulfur dioxide appears on the world. (여기서는 서로 side를 주고받는 방식으로 쓰셨는데. 그런 방법보다는, 한측 side의 의견을 다전달한뒤에 다른 side의 의견전달을 하는것이 중요해요.)
Lastly, the professor rebuts the reading passage's idea that sulfur dioxide is the main material of acid rain, by stating that even if the sulfur dioxide is eliminated acid rain would maintain its existence. (문장이 너무 길어요. 짧게 짧게 나가주시는게 좋아요. 이해하기가 힘들어요) The main ingredient is nitrogen dioxide. Acid rain composed of nitrogen dioxide is even more powerful. Therefore, if sulfur dioxide is demolished in the atmosphere, acid rain will not be deleted.
Comment: 문장쓰실때, 꼭 쉼표써주세요 정말 중요합니다. 그리고, 문장 짧게 써주세요. 이해하기 힘듭니다 길게쓰시면. 그리고, 포인트 전달하실때 다른스타일로 고집하지마시고, 하나으 ㅣ스타일로 일관성있게 써주시는게 좋을것 같아요. 이점들 꼭 명심해주세요. 그리고 렉처의 내용을 너 많이넣어주세요 !
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