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The writer and lecturer hold different opinions on the issue of proposed methods to eliminate population of cane toads population. The writer suggests three solutions to control the spread of cane toads, but lecturer argues that these methods will not work.
First, the lecturer feels that constructing fences will not be effective to stop the spread of cane toads. He claims that fences will only control the cane toad population in land, which means they can move to different region through rivers and streams where it is difficult to build fences. It is because fences doing so will disrupt flow of water and destroy natural aquatic habitats. This assertion directly refutes the writer's idea that building fences is a great way to prevent cane toads from moving to move further to the west region from North Australia, because it is workable and cost-effective. (이미 앞부분에서 building fences is a great way ~ 라고 설명하셨습니다. 굳이 뒤에서 because it is workable 이라고 하실 필요는 없습니다. 다만 끝에 cost effective 라는 말이 나왔는데 이것에 대한 설명은 없었으니 추가해주시면 좋겠습니다.)
Moreover, the lecturer points out that people who volunteer for removing eggs of cane toads local volunteers are not biologists. To be specific, unless they are professionally educated, it will be very hard for normal people to distinguish between cane toads and native frogs. Without a proper training, there is a risk to decrease that native frog population will drop. Furthermore, training all the volunteers would be inefficient(,) and even impractical. This claim challenges the writer's argument that local volunteers can catch and eradicate cane toad population by learning to recognize the eggs and tadpoles.
Lastly, the lecturer contends that virus (BIV) can seriously threaten the cane toads to die and it might population in other areas where it is native habitat. (말이 반복되는 것 같다는 생각과 함께 CLEAR 하게 전달되지 않는 듯한 느낌이 들어 고쳐보았습니다.) If the virus spreads to other parts of region where cane toads live in are native. It can be disastrous because it will damage the natural ecosystem. His claim casts a strong doubt on the writer's suggestion that application of virus is an the ultimate cure for the problem, which would prevent young tadpoles from being to mature enough for reproduction.
전반적으로 잘 하셨는데요~ 양쪽의 입장이 CLEAR 하게 드러날 수 있도록 문장을 써주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 중간중간 COMMENT 해드린 부분들 생각해보시면서 수정하시면 좋을 것 같아요! 수고하셨습니다~ ^^ |