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Opinion might be divided over whether one should not help their friends do their assignments but rather let them ask professional tutors to teach when they have hard time in completing their tasks over when one of my friends is having a hard time doing his homework, it is better for him to ask a professional tutor rather than me even with much information about it. People from different walks of life may take different stances on this continuous issue. Personally I believe that it is better to ask a professional tutor for help since he or she has much more information about the subject (이것이 첫번째 이유로 제시된 것 아닌가요?) than I have and there are two reasons (위의 밑줄이 첫 번째 이유인 것 같은데, 아예 두 번째 이유를 밝혀주세요.) that could validate my position.
The first thing I would like to make is that most of tutors know more about each subjects than we think they will. (where is “supportive sentence?” please add here.) Heavy workloads often make students exhausted. Sometimes, they feel disappointed at their poor grades. (Heavy workloads often make students exhausted and they sometimes feel disappointed at their poor grades. 문장 굳이 나누실 필요가 없을 것 같습니다!) As a result, they often lose their confidence. In this sense, tutors on good terms on the students can encourage students them to overcome such difficulties. Let me take my experience as an example. During my first semester in on my university, I didn’t know much about how to write my paper and prepare for the classes. Most of my friends had the same difficulties hard time as I had, even though we had a lot of source about subjects. Then my tutor, named Cho, gave us hands lent us a helping hand. He listened to our problems and provided us with words of encouragement and the new way of thinking. We were deeply moved by his kindness and tried to do the homework well. As a result, our grades were better in the semester than we thought it would. Without his help and (words of) encouragement, we could should not have overcome the difficulties successfully. (뒷받침 문장들을 정확하게 써주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 또한 tutors know more 이라고 했는데 글에서는 단순하게 encouragement 와 new way of thinking 에 대한 언급만 있었습니다. 위에서 말씀하신 바에 의한다면 tutor 가 더 많이 알았던 것은 subjects 에 대한 지식입니다. 그 부분을 강조할 수 있게 예시의 방향을 다시 잡아보시면 좋을 것 같습니다.)
Another compelling reason is that there are is only few things that so much we can take care of on our own. Today, many of students get some help from some materials that can let them know how to do the homework easily. Although the students have these materials, their reports and papers are often evaluated lower than their expectation the students expected them to. Therefore universities offer some tutors to help the students. A survey done by Korea University showed that majority of students’ grades were increased by 30% after the university started to implement the policy called Tutor& mentor. The survey also revealed that the students were was able to understand much more with tutors than on their own.
All in all, because of reasons mentioned above, I firmly believe that when we are having a hard time in doing homework, we should ask a tutor for help to do the way to take care of our homework.
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