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It is controversial whether the way of killing the cane toad. (여기서 whether 의 사용은 적절치 않습니다. Whether 은 절을 이끕니다. 즉, 주어와 동사가 나와주어야 합니다.)The speaker disagrees with the way to kill cane toad that is introduced by reading and makes points against the author's claims.
First, the speaker mentions that the national fence cannot prevent the spread of the toad. This is because(,) its eggs can be carried by (flowing) river liver stream which is flowing. This opposes the reading's claim that building the national fence can stop spreading of the toad(,) and prevent colonizing a region which is not colonized.
Second, the lecture argues that trapping the toad by hand is not easy to capture the toad. The speaker also insists that it will be dangerous to volunteers. (why is it dangerous? Please write the answer here) It rebuts This differ from author's assertion mention that the toad can be easily captured and destroyed by volunteers. The reading passage further argues insist that it is easier to kill destroying and gathering young toads and eggs the toad egg are even easier than adult toads. (why?)
Third, the professor explains that if the toad would be killed by viruses, whole eco system can be destroyed. When all toads are disappeared of the toad that is eatened by their predator died, their predator will be died soon. This contradicts reading contention that the cane toad populations could be are controlled by developing a disease-causing virus that specifically harm only the cane toads.
To sum up, the speakers argues that the way of killing the cane toad is introduced by passage is not correct. This casts doubt on the author's claims.(이런 문장은 사실상 Intro 에 더 어울립니다. 마무리 문장으로는 적합하지 않아보이네요.ㅠ)
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