▶ Your Answer :
There are several things that make a company good to work for such as benefits package, job security or fair work assessment. However, I personally believe that there are three things to make a company good to work for which are company reputation, working environment(,) and career advancement.
First of all, although company reputation is not tangible thing, it is vital for a company to build good relationship with suppliers and customers. (why do you think so? 여기에 소비자들의 신뢰를 언급할 수 있겠습니다.) To do that, thanks to reputation the company has, it the company gets more benefits in easier way. To be specific, if a company has great reputation, its customers would trust what it produces and serves /believe that it has better products or services compared to other ones which have similar price range and quality. Then, customers would buy its products or services. In addition, a well-known company would find suppliers easily with good deal. In the result, working for a well-known company gives employees easier and faster way to succeed. (구체적으로 설명해주시면 좋을 것 같네요. 말하고자 하는 포인트가 분명히 들어날 수 있는 예시요~)
Second, working environment is also important in that it can improve efficiency of staffs. (왜 그러한지까지도 서술해주시면 더 낫겠습니다.) Working environment includes not only a place where employees are working, but also atmospheres and relationship with co-workers(,) and boss. There is an example that a company improves workers’ efficiency by changing its environment. One of the biggest companies, Google, has unique workplace for its employees. It has play grounds, balls and riders to let their workers them be relaxed at any time. After the Google has changed the space for taking rest, it improves the efficiency of workers has been improved by 30 percent and workers relieve their fatigue and get fresh energy turning fatigue into fresh energy. Surprisingly, the relationship among co-workers got to be much friendly than before.
Finally, the more career advancements a company offer, the more satisfaction staffs have. By giving more opportunities to get career advancements, more workers would be motivated a company has workers motivated. Basically, people have a desire to get satisfaction by making efforts. It is same within a company. When employees know that they can be treated better and receive receiving more salary, they would willingly make a contribution for a company. In the perspective of a company, they can make more benefits. And On the other hands, in the view of workers, they can get more satisfaction. Thus, company good to work for has more opportunity to get promotion, satisfying the needs of workers to want be better. 이 부분 clear 하지 않습니다. Workers who are working in a company good to work for have more opportunities to get promoted and the company can satisfy the needs of workers. 이런 의미인가요?
It is obvious that a company which has good reputation, working environment(,) and more career advancement would be preferred by to employees(,) because those things give easier way to succeed and also can raise efficiency of work. Moreover by motivating workers with career advancements, they can work with much satisfaction.
구체적인 예시나 객관적 자료가 부족합니다. 보충해주시면 더 좋을 것 같습니다. 수고하셨습니다! ^^ |