■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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▶ Topic :
It is better for governments to spend their funds on the exploration of outer space than on earthly matters. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
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▶ Your Answer :
Some people would say that there is no more important thing than inspecting the university and it is worth to investigate. However, in my opinion, investigating lots of fund to searching outer space is worthless.
To begin with, there are more important things than exploring outer space. Even though, I can not evaluate which one is more worth, there are many things that should be treated in hurry. To be specific, there are many children in domestic who are starving due to poverty; also we have plenty of problems in environment pollutes and greenhouse gases problem also. It is not make sense that we put much funds in exploring cosmos instead of these issues. According to a study by Korean Department of Environment, funds for exploring outer spaces is at least about 200 million won at once. Also it reveals that if we use this fund to feed all needy people, we can feed them at least during a year. This shows how much money we are spending to less important work; and if it used to treat more valuable work, it would be great help.
On top of that, it is not reasonable. As I sad before, lots of money have been spent in exploring space. On the other hand, however, there is almost nothing that we benefit from investigation. They are just studying and researching repeatedly. There was no pracitical result ever. This is such a ridiculous that we keep investigate to space even though we never get benefit from it. According to the study by Korean Research Center, even though 5% of annual fund was spent to explore space, the advantage of its result was only evaluated as 0.5 million.
To sum up, there are many things that should be treated in hurry and exploring doesn't bring any economical benefits. In this regard, I believe that it is worse for government to investigate funds to exploring space. | |
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감사합니다~