■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : If you are selecting a leader for a student organization,
honesty is the most important to consider in deciding whom to vote for.
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▶ Your Answer :
It is difficult
to fathom what others think, but my opinion in regard to the given topic is
adamant. I believe that honesty should be the priority when selecting a leader
for a student organization for the following reasons which I will explore in
my essay. First of all, an (관사 필요합니다) honest
leader can establish reliable relationship with students. It is clear that honest
people give trust to others. The leader, therefore, must be honest, since he (단수, 복수) should be trustworthy and reliable to others. This explains why honesty is the
most important aspect when choosing a leader for a student organization. The experience
of my best friend, Lee, can be illustrated to prove this point. When he was in
high school, he used to be famous with his honesty among student and teachers.
At school, he came out as a candidate for the president of student council. After
the competitive vote, he was elected as the president. With his strong honesty
and sincerity, students started to trust him as a leader and easily followed
his decision. Consequently, he was able to successfully finish the annual
school festival, which was the largest school event, by cooperating with other
students. If it had not been for his honesty, he would not (줄임말 사용을 지양해주세요.) have been able to
build trustworthy relationship with other students and successfully finish the
festival. His experience proves that my argument is convincing.
In addition, a leader
with deficient honesty can bring significant damage to people. If the leader
gives (주어 동사 불일치) out lies to others, they will be unaware of important information, and are
likely to be incapable of coping with problems. My personal experience can be
illustrated to prove this point. When I was in university, I had to apply for a
scholarship to get financial aid from school. To get the requirements and
deadline, I contacted the student organization. The president of the
organization told me that the deadline for the scholarship had already past,
saying that I am not able to apply for the scholarship. Later on, however, I
found out that the president told me wrong information about the deadline on
purpose, so that the organization can take the scholarship money for
themselves. Consequently, the leader of the organization was expelled from the
school. This experience convinced me to think that honesty should be the most important
thing when choosing a leader.
As explicitly
and logically elaborated above, I agree with the statement that honesty is the
most crucial aspect when voting for a leader for a student organization, firmly
believing that being honest is an essential aspect of a leader.
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1. 각 문단 시작 전에 tab 버튼 눌러서 들여쓰기 해주세요.
2. conclusion의 분량을 3문장 이상으로 늘려주세요.
3. introduction의 분량을 3문장 이상으로 늘려주세요. 4. 문법은 대체적으로 깔끔한 편입니다.
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5. 두 번째 문단에서 personal example의 길이가 조금 긴 편입니다. statement를 2-3문장 더 써주시면 주장이 더 탄탄하게 만들어질 것 같습니다.