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People have different ideas and thoughts regarding whether which is the greatest source, among friends or magazine or online communities. Certainly, some people if asked would agree that script (What is it?) and online has a tremendous information. As far as I am concerned, I firmly believe that recommendation of friends has the greatest impact on choices. I will present two reasons to support my idea throughout the essay. Firstly, It is important to consider that other sources have a few of trustworthy. (Wrong sentence) Certainly, Paper and internet give people good information. (Why's that?) However, In most cases that sources is not true. To illustrate that idea let is consider following example. For instance, My friend has a many trip traveling experiences. However he was confronted with many hardships like wrong information, Because he had believed picture. (What pictures?) Additionally, Real view is different with picture. Consequently, He need to canceled his traveling plan change his schdule. In this respect, Sources of online and magazine can not be believed. Second of all, recommendation of friends is correct. It would be fair to say that some friend’s information does not have any information. On the other hand, Almost Generally, friends provide people with trustworthy has a real information. Take a case of To take an example of Yujin, A friend of mine whom I have known for over 10 years. Yujin recommended TV brand which is so cheap. Moreover, TV could was sold at an original price after 1 years later. (Why did you mention this?) Hence, I was able to save my money. In this regard, Friends supply always give us the good information. All in all, Everyone may hold a different view on the issue. Yet I absolutely support the perspective that people give a great information when we need to purchase something. The reason behind this is as follows. First, Magazine and online does have false information. Second, Friends tell us an give a efficient way when we need to buy something.
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