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Some people say that it is more effective to write an email or text message than to give people a call or use a voice mail to work out a problem; however, others disagree to this. Although each has advantages and disadvantages, I personally disagree with the above statement for two reasons.Q2< First, communication with people using mails or text message only makes misunderstandings a lot between them. Second, to express emotions, tone of voice is more important than letters.>
Q3 To begin with, there are a great number of misapprehensions among people who try to solve a problem using letters. The reason is that it is hard for sender to recognize what receiver’s situation is right now. Coming from my personally experience, to solve a problem with my boyfriend, I sent him email containing my mind seriously. After a week later, when I checked email box, I was able to know that he read my mail three days ago, thanks to receipt report. However, he did not respond to this, so I thought he was so rude and I decided that I was not going to meet him again. A few days later, I heard very shocking fact from one of my friend, which is my boyfriend’s father was dead. If I realized how he felt at that time, I could understand why he could not answer me directly and encourage him.
Q4 In addition, when we express how we feel, tone of voice has more influence on people than use words only. The reason is mails or text messages are unable to include feelings and situations. According to the recent research, people can understand a story more easily when they hear it than they read it. In study, researchers required thousand subjects to read a love letter, and they did other thousand subjects to hear the same love letter which is recorded by narrator. As a result thirty-four percent of former group reported they were moved; however, seventy-nine percent of latter’s did.
Q5 In conclusion, it can be seen it is hard to understand feelings correctly on mails or text messages; moreover, tone of voice is more effective to express how a sender feels than letters or words only. Considering the above two reasons, it is evident that it is less to write an email or text messages than to make phone call or use a voice mail.
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Q1,Q2<~> 주제문/주장1/주장2를 적어도 2-3번은 본문에 활용하게 되는데 paraphrasing을 너무 못해서요.. 두가지 방법으로 바꿔서 표현하는 방법좀 알려주세요.
예를 들어서 문제에서 묻는 질문이 it is better to write an email or text message than to make phone call or use a voice mail이면요
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Q3body1에서개인적인 견해에서 "남자친구와의 문제를 이메일로 풀어보려고 했는데 남자친구가 내 메일을 확인했음에도 불구하고 답장을 하지않았다. 나중에 알고보니 아버지가 돌아가셔서 그랬던것. 내가 그 사정을 미리 알았더라면 이해해줄수 있었을텐데..." 대충이런내용인데 그대로 잘 전달이 됐는지, 더 알맞게 표현하려면 어떻게 해야하는지좀 알려주세요! 그리고 '수신확인 기능 덕분에', '그가 어떤상황에 놓여있었는지' 등등 어떻게 영작해야할지 막막햇던 부분들입니다! 도와주세요...ㅜㅜ
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Q4body2에서 "최근연구결과 사람들은 같은 문구라도 읽는것 보다 듣는 것에서 더 잘 이해하더라. 실험자는 피실험자 천명에게는 연애편지를 읽게 시키고, 다른 천명에게는 듣게 시켰는데..그 결과 후자 그룹이 더 감동했더라.."이런 내용으로 쓰고 싶었어요...물론 연구내용은 제가 가상으로 만든 것이구요... 'a그룹은 이렇고 b그룹은 이랬다'식의 표현을 써야하는 통에 중복되고 여색한 문장이 많은 것같아요ㅜ 어떻게 바꾸면 좋을까요?
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Q5 결론은 문장 반복하는게 이상한거 같아서 주제/주장1/주장2를 재사용하는 정도만 썼는데..너무 부실한가요?.
아닙니다, 원래 주장을 해주시고 왜 그렇게 생각했느지만 써주시면 될 듯 합니다
폭풍질문 ㅜ번거롭게해서 너무 죄송합니다만ㅜ이제 시험이 한달 남짓밖에 남지 않아서요ㅜㅜ 부디부디 좋은 답변 부탁합니다!!! |