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Some people like doing work by hand. Others prefer using machines. Which do you prefer?
As our society has rapidly developed, people’s life is also becoming convenient and bountiful. Especially, inventing diverse equipments equipment(equipment는 뒤에 s못붙여요) helps people to do their tasks easily such as automobile, refrigerator, computer and smart mobile phone. There are some people insist that sometimes, working by using these equipment is not useful and convenient rather than by using hand. This is because, they get a satisfaction from their completed tasks those were done by their hand. However, I think that it is more efficient and beneficial to do works by using machines. In this essay, I will briefly present two reasons to support my opinion.
To begin with, people can reduce time for since they working work on many tasks which require lots of time and effort to labors by using machines. There is one example which is industrial revolution in England and The United States (미국은 The United States입니다). The industrial revolution made people produce goods by using technological tools and gave new electronic machines. Thanks to the industrial revolution, they were able to produce massive amount of products in the factories and then exported lots of their products to other countries. Therefore, their national economy condition was quickly improved and they also got competitive ability. This example explains that using machine is good for working people worker in production fields. Particularly, modern people’s life is busy and complicated, so they really need to use the machines.
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Second of all, the machines hardly have any error. it is hard to fiind error when using machines. Even though sometimes they are broken down,Although they sometimes broke down, it is not a serious problem, since machine can be fixed easily by using manual. On the other hand, it requires a little???? lot of time to cure the labor, when he has a disease. According to the survey conducted by sociology research team at Tokyo University, more than 80 percent of respondents who are owners of diverse factories answered that absence of workers provokes loss of profit to the owner. Moreover, there are various emergency situations which hinder them to do their tasks such as private situation or family problem. In this way, they assert that using machines is more convenient and comfortable.
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In conclusion, using machines has more advantages in many ways than using hands(앞에 more을 썼기 때문에 이왕이면 비교문으로 가주세요). As i have stated above, machines already were proved that they make people’s life more convenient and fruitful. Furthermore, they don’t make embarrassed embarrassing situation which cause damage to the people’s profit. For these reasons, I prefer doing works by using machines rather than doing works by hand.
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