It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay. |
There is ongoing debate over whether it is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city or not.
Some are against proposition, is better for children to grow up in the city than in the countryside. >Some people who disagree with the idea( proposition), say it is better for children to grow up in the city than in the countryside.
Others however believe that, growing up in countryside is more helpful to children. I agree with the latter stance and the present reason is below. >Others, however, believe that, growing up in the countryside is more helpful to the children. I agree with the latter stance and the reasons are presented below.(=as follows.) First, while living in rural area, children could get more natural circumstance. And that gives educational effect to children. >First, when living in rural area, children are surrounded by more natural circumstances. And that gives educational effects to children.
They could see the flowers, bugs and trees in person. They could get a lot of knowledge about natural. >They could get a lot of knowledge about nature.(natural-형용사)
It makes possible to get information for children from not only books, but also experience. >It makes possible for children to get information not only from books, but also from experience.
It is the privilege to children. The reason children in urban area could not see the things in environment. >It is the privilege to children in rural areas, for children in urban areas cannot experience nature. Second, the one of important things for children is health. > Second, one of the important things for children is health.
In rural area, they could live in fresh air, clear water. It is very good factors for growing children. >In rural areas, children can live with fresh air, and clear water. They are very good factors for growing children.
It makes children healthy, be aware their brain. >It makes children healthy, and clears their mind.
Otherwise, the big city is worse air, dirty water and very fast and complicated. So it is possible to bring about bad effect to children. >On the other hand, big cities have contaminated air and water, and lives in big cities are fast and complicated.(Otherwise- 그렇지 않으면)
For example, when I was a boy, l had been in countryside with my grand parent. >For example, when I was a boy, I lived in countryside with my grandparents.
There is very clear place where are many trees, fresh air and clear stream. So I can run around small hill and swim in the stream. >There were very clean places where I could see many trees, and clear streams, and breathe in fresh air.
I felt to be health. >I felt very healthy.
Above all, I can get knowledge from many bugs, animals and plants. >(Above all 은 주로 제일 앞에 쓰는 것이 자연스럽습니다.) Moreover,(last but not least) I can get knowledge about many bugs, animals and plants.
And when I was a student in school I have always gotten big confidence about environment and nature science. >When I was a student, I always had big confidence about natural environment and nature science.
At last, because children could get more knowledge from environment and be more health than children in urban area, living in countryside is better than in the big city for growing children.
>To summarize what I said above, (to conclude, Therefore ) because children can get more knowledge from environment, living in the countryside is better than in the big city when it comes to growing children.
They can learn about many things of natural system and understand more deeply. >They can learn many things about natural system and understand those more deeply.
The children, growing up in the big city could not see and touch the natural surrounding as much as countryside children. >Children growing up in big cities cannot see and touch the nature as much as chilren in countrysides.
And they have not much time to breathe fresh air and drink clear water. >Plus, they don't have much time to breathe fresh air and drink clear water.(=Plus, they don't have much time to enjoy the nature.)
It is very important for growing children to be health. Also, it is very important for growing children to be healthy.
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