The government should enforce the policy that people who are driving in the traffic jam time pay the money
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It is debatable whether people should pay the fee that drives in the time when the cars was in traffic jam. Some people say that people don’t have to pay the charge as the government’s policy since the drivers have the right in terms of freedom that whenever they can want do and the policy is not effective as paying the fee . However, I disagree with the idea that the drivers don’t need to pay the fee in the situation when there are many of the cars in the road because the people have not only the right but also the obligation and the way to control the traffic volume is the most efficient. To begin with, the drivers have a responsibility in reference with the traffic for everyone. We are living in a society. Although we can have a lot of freedom, we also are responsible for the society that has comfortable life for everyone. To achieve the goal, Each other (each other 이 주어로 오니까 좀 이상하네요 each people 이 어떨지..) should have the responsibility(단어가 너무 중복됩니다) as they drive in the heavy traffic. For example, a person’s think can have influence on the society. Sometimes, we think that only oneself don’t have the effect due to the fact that a person have too much tiny influence in the society. But, a person’s think is applied to everyone, the power can be mighty. So whenever we can be damaged by the think. Hence, I think that the drivers should be responsible for(위에도 나온 표현이예요 바꾸세요다른 단어로요) the society by paying the fee.---> 그리고 예가 너무 일반적입니다. 예라기 보다는 그냥 내용에 가까와요. 가능하면 실제처럼 어제 출근시 이러이러한 일이 일어났는데 그것은 사람들이 다른 사람들 배려하지 않기 때문이었다..좀 더 구체적이고 실제 있었던 것처럼 지어서 쓰시는게 좋아요 Moreover, paying the charge is the best way to regulate the traffic. Until now, we have been thinking the most value on the money. This is due to the fact that people think that their money is significant because the money is earned by working in(지우세요) hard. The drivers can be controlled by the fee. To illustrate this point, recently study shows that when the people pay the fee, the traffic volume reduces the volume to its 42.5%. Beside, the drivers can go more quickly the places they want. They are very satisfied with the policy. Therefore, the policy is sufficiently effective the (지우시고)method to adjust the traffic volume. In summary, I have positive idea in respect with paying the drivers the fee in traffic jam. Since there are a few advantages such as keeping the society soft and controlling the number of the cars. Therefore, people received more benefits when the government enforces the policy. |