University athlete departments should receive the same amount of fundingas university libraries. |
Where is your favorite place in your university?
Some people might answer (it is) their major building, cafeteria, student center and so on.
However, I would like to say (the?) swimmimg pool in (the x) gym which I often visit when I have (a x) free time.
It is true that the reason going to university is for our academic improvement. >It is true that the reason we go to university is for our academic improvement/ It is true that the reason for going to university is the academic improvement.
But we should care of our health for studying and enjoying college life. >But we should care about our health in order to study and enjoy college life.
In accomplishing these, it can't be better to take advantage of university faculty for free.
First, sports activities promote our physical health.
Imagine students' life.
They attend classes, have a meal, and go to the library to finish their assignment, >They attend classes, have meals, and go to the library to finish their assignments.
staying in one place quite longer. (than what ? )
But if they spend even a short time exercising, it is very helpful for their health. >But if they spend even a short time exercising, it will be very helpful for their health.
In my case, it is wasting too much time to go to the health club off campus.
Instead, I could save my time by using school gym and keep my physical condition very well when I study later. >Instead, I could save my time for studying by using school gym and (I could) keep my physical condition in good shape.
In addition, sports activities give me a chance to get along with my friends.
School gym is filled with many students who are interested in sports.
So we can make new friends, playing games together.
Also, we can go there to hang out with our old friends without spending much money.
For instance, I could learn how to dive from a girl who i just met in the swimming pool that day.
After that, we becames very close friends not only in the pool but also in the other places. >After that, we could become very close friends not only in the pool but also in the other places. (but also outside the pool.)
To conclude, it deserves to support university athletic department as well as university libraries. >To conclude, university athletic departments deserve as much support as university libraries do.
I belived the healthier students are the better they study. >I believe the healthier students are the better they study.
Therefore, students will release their stress from study and have fun by using university gyms or stadiums. >Therefore, sutdents should release their stress from studying and have fun by using university gyms or stadiums. |
줄 친건 잘 모르겠는건데 꼭 좀 봐주시구요~ 다른것도 조언부탁드려요 ^^