Each person has a different character even thought same parent. |
Each person has a different character even thought same parent. There are several ( when more than 3 ) >> some reasons. The First reason is that people can get their own character cause >> depending on birth order. I totally believe in this reason. I have a younger brother. He has a very activity >> active ( must use an adjective before a noun) personality. He like go out with other friends. He has very adaptable person ,and also ( also 는 부사 라 뒤에 절이 오기 위해 접속사를 쓰셔야 합니다. ) he is very good at change >> changing his mind. Otherwise, I tend to have a serious mind when I choose my own decision. I am a very careful person. That’s why I believe about birth-order?? .
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Second, Family’s finance is a good reason to change their character. Some one grew up in a wealth family. He is quite different from poor family >> He may live in a whole different environment from a poor family. Person who grew up in wealth family have a more confidence.
The paragraph could be seen as a off topic which is far from what the question want to ask, in my perspective. You deal with different circumstances children would be able to go through. However, the question is not about the children under different families but about the children under the same parents, right?
Third, who got more attentions from their parent?? 의문문 인가요?. Usually, people think about >> 생략 parent love is equal to children. In my opinion this sentence is not true. Parents are usually show preference for their children >> one particular child. For example, in I mention about several reason about what can make person character. I think birth-order and parent attention about children and family finance can be make personal character.
>> 글 을 만들줄 아시지만 아직 너무 많은 문법적 실수들이 보이고 이로 인해 전하려는 의미가 변하는 경우도 있네요. 시험 시간이 아직 충분하다면 더 많은 문법 공부를 하셔야 겠습니다. 그냥 글만 무작정 많이 쓴다고 글이 느는 것은 아닙니다. 자신의 부족한 부분을 채워 나가야 하지요. |