After graduation from high school, students should take a year off to travel or work before going to the university . |
“Mommy, Daddy.” these are the first things that we learn. As soon as we are born, we learn and learn more >> more and more about new things. At age of 3 or 4, children learn alphabet and numbers. Within couple years later ( 생략 ), children are sent to school which is made of 12 years of long course. Of course, humans are born to learn new things, but I believe that spending one year to travel or experience work-world would be very helpful. ( travel the world 와 experience works 도 learn new things 의 한 종류라고 생각이 되네요. but 보다는 therefore 가 낮지 않을까 싶은데요.) To begin with, there is no time for one to take a year off after graduating from university. After university, only thing one has to face is hard work-world. Like I said, “No time left to enjoy.” Before going into University, traveling and experiencing work world can be very beneficial. Going into real world by alone, we can travel to other countries to refresh our mind and get to know about other things. Experiencing work-world can be also very beneficial because of ( 뒤에 명사 ) >> because (뒤에 절) its connection to >> between companies and experiences from the working can help better understanding the field of the work ( 추가 )at >> than university classes. If I have chance to take a year off to travel and work, it will be very pleasure moment to look back from the hard work days that I will have. Some people may argue that if they take a year vacation between high school and university, it might break rhythm >> phase of school life. However, from >> based on or according to university school research team ‘s study >> the result of a university research team, most of subject students who are attending university answered that taking a year off before university sounds very helpful, and students who actually had year off responded that it helped them in great ways of handling hard times and also in reconsidering their majors. This simply shows that it just made them look over their real talents and what they wants to do by experiences of work. And also they answered that memories of traveling >> travel (명ㅁ사형도 됩니다.) have played great role when they were in slump to study and life at university. To make long story short, we learn bit of everything at school such as Math, English, Science, and many others. However, what we learn in university is all about deep study of one’s major and things related to one’s future job. Since education through high school doesn’t really take big part at university, I strongly believe that one should take year off to enjoy and make some changes by traveling and experiencing work-world. |
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