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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Topic : Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. | |
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In modern society, people who can finish more work in less time are considered efficient. This type of pressure has caused people to rush in working and even cooking. People have considered the time spent on cooking to be wasted and have developed fast foods. It is true that there are advantages of fast foods. However, there are some drawbacks too.
First, although easy-to-cook foods can be cooked quickly and with less effort, something to make the foods easy-to-cook has been added to the foods, like artificial flavorings. People have invented easy-to-cook foods to save time. However, if someone gets illness due to eating those foods, they are not saving time anymore, but instead, they make people spend more time in the hospital.
Cooking is also considered to be an art. Just few decades ago, people could spend time choosing what to eat, how to cook, and thus enjoying cooking. people would spend time choosing what to eat and how to cook, and thus enjoy cooking. Also, they could reflect on their life while cooking. However, the fast foods have gotten rid of those funs out of cooking.
In Korean culture, every family member is expected to be present at the family gathering at dinner having fellowship to bond with each other. However, fast foods have gotten rid of those regular family gatherings and thus have weakened the relationships among family members.
In conclusion, although there are some advantages in easy-to-cook foods, it they also accompaniesy some disadvantages. People seems to be eager to gain something seemingly important not knowing that they are losing something more important.
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