■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Up to now, there have been many different kinds of arguments for death-penalty. Most advocates say that all of those who trespass on person’s property for the purpose of illegal profits or momentary desire must disappear in our lives. On the other hand, some opponents for the death penalty claim that to restrict criminals’ freedom is to force them to forsake even fundamental rights. I have considered about a capital punishment and as a result, I came to a conclusion that all criminals must vanish from the world.
Just about a year ago, I regarded a lot of criminals as valuable people, who could even be respectable if they regret their wrong behaviors. However, when I watched TV in Korea, I was aware of unfortunate consequences of what a malicious crime does in one’s life. The accused was sentenced to 10 years with opening his detailed information to the public, said Mr. Park, a reporter, advocate for death-penalty. He added, “After 10 years, the victim of his vicious act will be exposed to such dangerous situations once more and she might have to tremble with recurrent remindful images of him. Above all, she will just be 22 years old.” At this point, I suddenly realized that 10 years are never long enough and I thought that his corrupt routine has made at the expense of a large number of people’s lives.
Nevertheless, most violent crime is increasing each year and the statistics show us substantial amount of factors of ruin. I think that the government should not only efficiently make an effort to prevent people from various factors of crimes, which would vastly affect people’s lives, but should be concerned about many of those who are in adverse circumstances to protect against corruption of human character. | |
제가 봤을때 약간 헷갈리는 문장은 있으나 뜻이 괜찮아 그냥 냅뒀습니다.
영어 잘하시는분들 토플 첨삭한다는뜻에서 봐주시지마시고, 한사람을 가르쳐주신다는 관점으로 댓글부탁드립니다.