Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. |
Some people say that parents are the best teacher in our lives because they believe that we spend most of our time with parents. However, I disagree because we are always taught not only by parents but also friends, school teachers. They give us a lot of help in different ways. Also, sometimes not all parents are good.
1) best teacher -> best teachers 2) Some people say that / because they believe / we spend most of our time. 3개의 절이 하나의 문장으로 합쳐져 있네요. 이러한 구조는 복잡하기 때문에, "나 이렇게 복잡하게 문장을 구성할 수 있을 만큼 영어 문법실력 있어요."라고 말씀하실 수는 있겠지만, 실제로는 좋지 않은 문장입니다. 언어란 간결하고 명료하게 표현하는 것이 최고겠지요. 사실, "they believe that"은 그다지 필요치 않습니다. 그냥 because we spend most of our time with parnets라고 써도 똑같은 내용이죠. 같은 내용이라면 간결하게 표현해 주세요. 3) but also friend -> but also by friends. 위의 2)와 마찬가지로, 대조시키고자 하시는 부분이 "부모에 의한 학습"과 "친구에 의한 학습"이므로 대비를 명확하게 해주시기 위하여 by parents와 by friends라고 명확하게 적어주심이 좋겠습니다. 4) friends, school teachers -> friends and school teachers. 명사와 명사는 당연히 and로 이어줘야죠.
Many of us always have friends around. What we usually do with them is an interaction, which certainly follows the friendship. By interacting with friends, we get a friendship, know how to face peope easily and also, develop an intimacy. Knowing an interaction, and get along with people our generation is not very easy to be taught by parents, and is often taught by friends.
5) Many of us -> We (문법상 문제가 아니라, 표현상의 문제) 6) What we usually do with them is an interaction -> 어색한 표현. 7) which certainly follow the friendship -> which certainly is followed by friendship 8) we get a friendship -> we build a friendship 9) Knowing an interaction, and get along with people our generation -> ??? 무슨 의미죠???
School teachers teach us gaining knowledge. Many of us are taught subjects like chemistry, mathematics by teachers, not really by parents. Some may, but is not an usual case. Teachers are always behind of our improvement. Some students spend their time more in a school than in a house and teachers support them. We learn various kinds of subjects in order to develop our knowledge and to get our achievement. In addition, before we apply to an university, teachers academically support us.
10) ...teach us gaining knowledge도 어색한 표현이네요. 그냥 teach us knowledge. 11) Many of us -> we 12) like chemistry, mathematics -> like chemistry and mathematics 13) an usuan -> a usual 14) behind of our improvement -> 어색한 표현
Some parents are not able to teach or give a help on their children. Some children may not even see their parents because both of them are busy all day long. Thus, children spend their time learning from somebody else. In other hands, some parents may not be good to be a supporter because they might grown up without receiving any instruction from their parents. This may be inherented to their children as well, so it is difficult to say that parents are the best teacher.
15) good to be a supporter -> good enough to be a supporter 16) they might grown up -> they might have grown up 17) instruction from their parents -> 어색한 표현 (부모 자식 사이에 instruction은 이상하죠) 18) ... as well, so it is ... -> ... as well, and so it is ...
Overall, for those reasons I have mentioned above, I believe that there are many who can be a teacher. I also think that there are no best teacher exist in our lives. Parents might be so good teacher, however, friends, and school teachers may be the best at teaching some other kinds that parents are not able to teach.
19) there are no best teacher exist in our lives -> there are no best teacher in our lives 20) no best teacher -> no single best teacher 21) so good teacher -> good teachers |