Nowdays, most of secondary schools provide their students with art and music classes. Many people actually don't like this because they think it is better to study more academical subjects using that time which is spent by concentrating on art and music classes. However, there are many valuable things in those classes from the shool.
First of all, students can not have the chance to take art and music classes without such formal ones providing by shcools. This is because the preparing for an entrance examination and for getting a job are their major matter of concern. Therefore, if such artistic classes are not provided, some students who have more artistic talent rather than academic subjects will may spend their precious time without noticing their abilities. To illustrate this point, my eldest brother working at a painting academy could have the chance to recognize his outstanding ability to paint in the art class of school and he had never experienced artistic activities outside of school. As this example demonstrated, even though it does not include all students, art and music classes from the school are pretty important in light of respective art industries and individuals.
Furthermore, art and music classes have affirmative effects on students' emotional states. Since they don't have enough time to relax due to taking other classes and doing assignments, getting refreshment is needed to them. According to a study, to relieve students' stresses coming from academic matters, not only do they need to have sports activities, but arstistic ones also are required. That is, they can have relax during art and music classes and those enables them to study more efficiently and be more hearty.
To conclude, considering students' emotional states and their possibility of having an artistic talent, secondary school can require art and music classes to all students.
1. using that time which is spent by concentrating on art and music classes 예능과목에 집중하느라 소비되는 시간을 사용하여 좀더 학문적인 과목에 공부~~~ :제 의도는 그건데 문장이 안 어색한가요???
2. such formal ones providing by shcools 학교에 의해 제공되는 그런 공식적인 예능과목 : 안 어색한가요?
3. matter of concern 수일치에서 문제가 없나요??
4. he had never experienced artistic activities outside of school 학교 밖에서는 예능 활동을 겪은 적이 없었다라고 쓴건데 괜찮나요?
5. academic matters 학업적인 일 이라고 쓴 건데 괜찮나요?
6. not only do they need to have sports activities, but arstistic ones also are required 낫온리 벗올소를 이렇게 썻는데 안 어색한가요??
7. those 바로 앞의 art and music class 를 가르킨다고 쓴건데 괜찮나요?
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