■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic : The news media is a reliable source of unbiased information |
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▶ Your Answer : An intriguing topic of discussion at hand is whether the news media is a reliable source of unbiased information or not. Although people may hold different ideas and opinions, I personally support the idea that the news media cannot be a reliable source on account of two reasons.
First of all, news media earns money as more and more people click and view their articles (그래서 정확하게 본인이 말하려고 하는 것이 무엇인가요?). Moreover, as writers get incentives from the company as view count of their article gets higher, writers tend to write articles about specific topics, such as sports, entertainment gossips, and sexual rumors. In order to get much more attention, some writers even put numerous unverified information. For instance, I read an article about a sports star who had a hidden relationship with a married movie star. The article was writing that wrote they have verified this information with many friends and relatives of the stars. However, when the movie star interviewed and identified her alibi at the questioned moment, every content of the article was revealed as fraud. 뭔가 의식에 흐름으로 에세이를 서술한 거 같다라는 느낌이 듭니다. 논점이 가면갈 수록 흐려진다라는 느낌이 듭니다. 좀 더 자신이 어떠한 말을 하려고 하는 지를 잘 파악한 후 에 서술하시는 것 이 좋을 거 같습니다
On top of this that, writers and editors have their own opinions and these opinions easily affect the whole content of the articles which affect the content of article. As far as the writers are human, it is never possible for them to remove all the effects from their biased personal view Since writers are human, it is hard to remove own personal view about an issue. This is the reason why there are newspaper companies that are classified as conservative or democratic. In this regard, conservative newspaper companies are inclined to write articles or editorials which are against democratic parties. For example, Chosun-ilbo, which is one of the most famous news paper companies in my country, is very conservative. This company usually publish publishes writings that blame all the movements of democratic party and they seem very convincing at first glance. However, if I read various articles from different publishing companies, I can find tons of information that are deliberately skipped and deleted from the article that I first read.
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nutshell, although whether the news media is reliable or not is open to debate,
it seems reasonable to claim that we should not depend on a single medium in
order to get balanced and healthy opinion. Fair: 17~23 점수: 20 일단 기본적으로 지적하고 싶은 부분은 전체적으로 문법적 오류들이 있습니다. 제가 첨삭한 것을 보시고 확인 해주시길 바랍니다. 쩌가 또 느낀 부분은, 전체적으로 설명이 간결하지 않습니다. 어떠한 말을 하려고 하는 지 잘 파악이 안되는 부분들이 많은 거 같습니다. 특히 첫 번째 바디에서 이유를 구체적으로 설명하는 부분이 많이 빈약한 거 같습니다. 이러한 부분을 조심하면서 에세이를 서술하시는 것이 좋을거 같습니다. 수고많으셨습니다.
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정규책 뒤 모델 에세이로 쓰인 주제로 독립형 작성해보았습니다. 첨삭 해주시면 정말 감사하겠습니다!