▶ Your Answer :
There is a plethora of
opinions regarding imposing more tax on companies that produce pollutants that
do harm to surrounding environment. I firmly believe that such companies should
pay be paid more taxes for two main reasons which I will explore in the following
essay.
First of all, companies will
find alternative ways to make their products in order to expend less on taxes. If
environmental taxes place a huge financial burden on companies, it might be
more beneficial to find another way to produce that will do less harm to
nature. Companies that used to produce
body scrubs containing micro plastic particles is a compelling example of this.
A research from national institute of environment revealed the fact that micro
particles from varieties of scrubs flow to rivers and sea, and eventually
accumulate in fishes fish. Since these plastic particles can enter the body of those
who consume those fishes and cause health problems government implemented a
policy of imposing high taxes on companies whose products contain micro-particles.
Many companies seized the production of body scrubs and toothpastes that has
micro-particles in order to evade those taxes.
Secondly, taxes or fines
from companies can be used to save the nature. For example, aforementioned
plastic beads can still be in water even after the production has stopped. The
government can use the money to make filter systems that has have the ability to
separate small particles before they enter the body of water. Aforementioned
companies are good examples. Fines taken from those companies that did not stop
the production were used to install new facilities that filter particles and
fund researchers who work to find out how much the river and sea was polluted
and how much impact it is going to have on human body.
To sum up, I believe the
government should impose heavy tax on companies that produce pollutants because
companies will find a way to evade the environmental tax obligation and because
that money can be used to improve the environment. Good; 24~30 점수: 24 일단 첫 번째 바디까지는 잘 서술하였습니다. 전체적인 문장 구조는 문법적인 부분에 서 아 주 매끄럽게 문제 없이 서술되었습니다. 하지만 문제가 된다라고 생각하는 부분은 두 번째 바디입니다. 이 부분에서 문제가 뭐냐면 너무 바디가 짧기 때문에 이유를 서포트 할 수 있는 구체적인 설명이 빈약합니다 특히 마지막 부분이 가장 빈약하게 끝맺음이 된 거 같습니다. 마지막을 좀 더 구체적인 설명을 하면서 끝났스면 더 좋은 에세이엿을 거 같습니다. 수고많으셨습니다. |