When one decides to buy a product, he or she can consider a lot
of information and compare the prices from both online and offline markets. The
overflowing information can even lead people to confusion because they do not
know what to believe. I believe the recommendation from friends affects the
people most when they consider a big purchase with following reasons.
To begin with, as one may know friends' tastes and
preference, people can assure that the product is valuable for him or her. If
it's it is different (이 부분이 설명이 더 필요 할 거 같습니다, 뭐가 다르기 때문에 결정을 쉽게 할 수 있는지), they can easily decide the purchase. For example, I saw one of
my friends use using a new type of laptop that is writable with electric pen. He used
the laptop as a note instead of a paper note. I just purchased a similar device
to write the electric notes and save them in the laptop. (다음 설명은요?? 뭔가 급전개로 에세이를 끝내신거 같습니다)
On top of it, one can acquire frank drawbacks, a place that
they have bought in the lowest price, and a chance to use them for a while. One
may ask their friends who have purchased earlier the real reviews including
pros and cons of the product. In addition, one need not search for the lowest
price if the friends already have looked for it. They can just buy from the
same place. If a friend is generous enough to borrow the product, they can even
have a chance to use them for free and decides whether it really is needed for
them.
Many sources other than recommendation from friends can
affect the purchase. The information or review from friends is reliable since
they really have used them for a while. Knowing friends' favors, one may easily
decide whether a product matches theirs. For these reasons, I believe the
recommendation from friends is the best way to decide on purchasing a product.
Fair: 17~23
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일단 전체적으로 문법적 오류 특히 시제 오류가 많은 거 같습니다. 과거형을 써야 하는 부분에서 현재 완료형으로 쓰셨고요. 또한 바디 1에서 부족한 부분이 많았습니다. 구체적인 정보가 들어가야만, 이해를 할 수 있었던 부분들이 있습니다. 이러한 부분들을 숙지하시고 고치시길 바랍니다. 수고하셨습니다.