moviegoing에 대한 당신의 생각을 서술하시오 |
From the start of this,I want to say that moviegoing is a disaster. Many of my friends who don't know me very well sometimes asked me to go to the theater together. Every time when I was asked, I always refused it. Moviegoing offers me kinds of entertainments but it never makes me have moviegoing. Inconvenience of moviegoing, difficuties to make time for movie, and high-end price of tickets are reasons that make me frustrated about moviegoing. First of all, there are lot's of problems in the theater.When I try to buy a ticket, It seems that I should wait for my turn timelessly. In some cases, tickets are sold out during the waiting. After I enter the theater, there're more problems. Although I get the ticket, low quality of movie screen is wasting my money. Furthermore, unbearable noises from naughty children is arousing my temperament. They, in the long run, triggers me to get upset. Then, I give up enjoying moviegoing and scream to myself 'It is my fault to expact awsome moviegoing!'. What about the hygiene in the theater? it is so inferior that disturbing my condition. Crashed snacks and spilt soda are spreaded all over the floor. It's absolultly disgusting. Next, there are not too much time to enjoy moviegoing. Every person is workng busy. There is no single person who has limitless time. In my case, I have to go several academies and not too much time for me. However moviegoing is requiring vast amounts of time. For instance, I have to look carefully at the schedule if there is time.Although I find a empty space, it takes 15 minutes to reach the theater. Through all of the complex process, there will be a chacne to see movie screen provided that tickets still remain. Of course, spending time for moviegoing is ridiculous because just one click of tv button will serve the same service as the theater does. Therefore, there are no actual reasons to go to the theater spending meanless time. Most of all, breathtaking price of tickets is a worst part of moviegoing. Just few years ago, price of tickets were pretty reasonable but now it's unbelievable. Theater only provide seats with movie on the big screen, but I should pay over 10000 won. It's such a preposterous thing to buy the ticket. Moreover, condition of the theater seldom matches with its price. As I mentioned, quality of screen is so low, children are shouting. There are even some people who enter the theater with their pets! I'm so curious, when considered the shortcoming of theater, whether the price of ticket is deserved. In a nut shell, from the very moment, I always refuse my friends' suggestion when it comes to moviegoing. Why? Following reasons will explain perfectly ; Inconvenience of theater, lack of time for moviegoing, and skyrocketed price of tickets. Therefore, I think moviegoing is a disaster. |
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그래서 ,,제가 생각하기에는틀린 문법적인 오류를 찾아서 고쳤는데,,
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