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Many people believe that it’s very important to make large amounts of money, while others are satisfied to earn a comfortable living. Analyze each viewpoint and take a stand.
The issue that how much money we want to earn depends on which kind of achievement is considered as more valuable for each person. These days, many people are satisfied with themselves when they earn a lot of money and use it for more luxurious life. However, surprisingly, others deny have too money, since they don’t think money is the only one factor to evaluate successful life.
To many CEOs, money is much more than money itself. Earning a lot of money means that they have achieved good reputation and high position in the company. It also indicates that they have worked diligently, much harder than others; and they have acknowledged their extraordinary abilities and brilliant ideas. To them, money is a kind of standard to evaluate if their whole lives have been successful. Many young people want to be a millionaire like Warren buffet, Steve Jobs, Bill Gates and Ronald Trump. This is because not only do they want to make large amount of money, but also they want to build up successful life through by feeling self fulfillment and possessing something more than money.
However, if you see many soap operas or movies, the main character who has earned a lot of money is always unhappy and has complaints about their lives, since he or she does not have time to share with their lovers, family, and friends. Because of the rush of works, they become far away from people they most love. Finally, the main character regrets previous days in which they work only and, thinks again about what the most important thing for their lives. People are satisfied to earn money for just a comfortable life think highly of the relationship with others rather than achievement in society and work place. To them, keeping a good relationship with lovers, sharing time together, making happy memories are much more important achievements for successful life.
In my case, I would like to choose the second type of life. Without my lover, family, and friends, money does not have any meaning for me. I would feel deep emptiness at the end of my life. When my aunt was hospitalized because of kidney cancer, there was no one to take care of her and stay with her, since she has worked hard for her company, giving up all of her private life, even her love. However, it’s impossible to judge which view point is right. It’s up to individual. It is significant to judge wisely which kind of achievement and which kind of life each of us want. Before my aunt passed away, she said, “Though I’m alone now, but I don’t have any regrets, because I have lived by my own choice and determination.”