▶ Your Answer : Some
people think that hasty decision are never the right ones. However, in my
opinion, it is sometimes the right desicion one for the following subsequent
reason.
To
begin with, hasty decision can save time. Imagine, if you waste time deciding any
other choice, the time will the time wait for you? The answer will be no. In the world
we live in, time is gold. Since we cannot turm time back, we must decide
hastely. For example, when I was high school, I have had a hard time adapting my to school.
Since it is was hard for me to choose my next university's major. Rather, I did not choose my major until deadline, I cannot
enroll to universities. So I was entrance entered into the university next year. Thanks to
this experience. I was able to realize that hasty decision sometimes are the
right one and it was turning point of my life.
On
top of that, hasty decision can help relieve stress less stressful. To explain, people nowadays
have pressure not only physically but also mentally. In For this reason, hasty
decision can help relieve stress while when people who decide something. Take the
example of my friend. My friend always cannot decide all of things. A study
conducted by a group of mentally major is a good example of this. The
reseachers tracked the habit of 200 students over a 3 month period, in order to
find out how they approach and solve problem that they face themselves. What
they found was intriguing. The student who relied on their own ability were better
at problem solving than those who continously strived to get others help. The
reason was that their own ability was their hasty decision, in order to decide,
they can feel relaxed and comfortable.
In
summary, hasty decision can save time and help be less stressful. In this regard, I
firmly believe that hasty decision are the right one for the reasons I
mentioned above.
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