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Some people think that homework is not necessary to study hard for the student. They might mention that education at school is enough for students so the student should do something else such as playing sports, reading a book and so on and reading a book. However, In my opinion, reports are essential things for the student because it makes them to remind what they learned in a lecture from school. Generally, people can memorize well everything by repeating of from learning. After school, furthermore, student can freely think about their interests from the lecture they learned at school.
To begin with, homework compels students to read some materials about their homework. That is possible to remind student what they learned that day. It means that they can understand better because the lecture will be arranged well in their brain. To be specific, I have always seen that who get a high grade do their best on homework. They absolutely knew what the important things is in the lecture.
On top of that, students can discuss what they learned with themselves after school because there is not a limitation of time no time limitation. They can concentrate the meaning of lecture with their opinion. It can help them to take interests what they are attracted more. From this perspective, homework is more important things because they will complete their study with their willing. But there are need student to have their momentum. (이 부분을 통하여서 무슨 말을 하려고 하는 건가요?? 설명이 필요해 보입니다) That is homework should not be simple problem such as repeatable math calculation and dictation of some sentence (문장이 적절치 않습니다. 문법적으로 말이 되지 않습니다). From my experience, I really hated that kind of homework because I thought it is waste of time. There is a different between memorizing and understanding. We don’t want to resolve some problems already we know. That can not give us achievement. In this regard, homework should be given to students to remind again what they learned today. It can help their memory exactly. And a productive homework is able to give daily achievement for student. Consequently, they will get interest more and be motivated for studying. Fair: 17~23 점수: 19 일단 에세이가 균형이 안잡혀 있습니다. 가장 본인의 의견을 제시할 만한 단락 보다 인트로가 더 깁니다. 인트로에 중점을 두면서 에세이를 서술하는 것이 아니라 단락에 초점을 맞추는 것이 좋습니다. 일단 첫 번째 단락이 짧기 때문에 이 부분을 통하여서 무슨 말을 하려고 하는 것인지 잘모르겠습니다. 또한 두 번째 단락에서는 어떠한 말을 하려고 하는 지 잘 모르겠는 부분이 있기 때문에 제가 첨삭한 것을 보시고 확인하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셧습니다. |