▶ Your Answer : Finally, wave-energe facilities do not affect surrounding landscape since they do not be visible due to be relatively small. Once again, the professor argues by stating that wave-farm used to paint bright color, so they can be easily spotted. First of all, the reading says that the wave-energy is constant and dependable because frequency and intensity of wave have same seasonal variations in the area nearby oceans. As a result, oceanographers will be able to predict the amount of the wave-power. However, the listening debunk the claim by stating that they have a technical problem that cause to harsh marine life, and the ability that wave-energy facilities can create the power can be fluctuate widely. Second, the passage states that it is proven that the wave farms can be environmentally friendly. To provide reason, they says that wave-farms do not have the process of burning fossil, so they are not emitted harmful gases in the atmosphere. Plus, since they use floating converters, bad fuel do not leak into the water. On the other hands, the listening argues that floating converter have harmful energy, and high toxin, so they attract the ocean life if they leak the ocean. Finally, wave-energy facilities do not affect surrounding landscape since they do not be visible due to be relatively small. Once again, the professor argues by stating that wave-farm used to paint bright color, so they can be easily spotted.
Fair: 17~23 점수: 18 일단 인트로는 어디있나요? 인트로가 없습니다. 통합형 에세이에서 인트로가 필요한 부분은 리딩과 리스닝의 중요 주장들을 정리해서 말을 하려고 하는 것이기 때문에 이러한 부분들을 숙지하시길 바랍니다. 인트로가 없다보니 전체적인 구조적인 부분에 잇어서 문제가 많이 들어나는 거 같습니다. 또한 철자적오류들이 너무 많습니다. 에세이를 서술하시고 난 후 꼭 proofreading을 하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다. |