■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : Many teachers assign homework to students every day.
Do you think that daily homework is necessary for students? |
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▶ Your Answer :
It is disputable whether many teachers should
assign homework to students every day. Depending on one’s background and one’s
personal experience, one’s perspective on this issue can significantly differ.
That being said, in my opinion, I advocate that it is not appropriate for
student to do assignment every day for the following reasons. First, homework prevents
students from having (prevent 목적어 from 동사 ing 형태로 항상 씁니다.) diverse experience. Second, doing just homework interferes students when making various relationships.
To begin with, student cannot have a wide
array of experiences by doing homework every day. On top of that, experience is
one of the most important factors of success in this world. Imagine people only
have textbook knowledge and always do homework like machine. Their view will be
so narrow. By traveling and going to filed trip, students can not only gain
diverse experience but also broaden their horizon of the world. In this sense, performing
just homework is not a good way to expend student’s perspective. For instance, my personal experience can be
used to valid the claim above. I have a friend who lives in a different city called
Daegu. My friend’s school was a very prestigious high school in the city. Thus,
there were always a lot of assignments. My friend did not have a free time, so
she could not spend her time to travel abroad to even near cities. In contrast
to my friend, my school did not forced students to do a great deal of homework.
Therefore, after finishing the class, I could participate in many
extracurricular activities such as visiting historical buildings or playing sports.
Even now when we are college students, she often complains that she had a hard
time speaking diverse opinions because there was a no time at all in high school
for expending her horizon. Contrarily, when I perform the research project or
speech, I am always good at expressing my opinion based on my several experiences.
Consequently, I firmly believe that the experiences that I had in high school
were very helpful for me.
On top of that, a lot of homework makes
student not socialize with their friends or other people. In particular, the
meaning of the success has completely changed compared to the past. If it was merely
focusing on one’s own way and excelling others, now it is quite different.
Along with your own ability, it is crucial to be recognized by people and have
followers. In this sense, developing social skills is more important than just
doing assignments every day.
For example, my sister’s personal
experience can be adopted to explain what I mentioned above. My sister was not
interested in studying academic subject in high school. Instead of performing
assignment, she sometimes enjoyed climbing club and jazz dance club. There were
many people. She interacted actively with not only our country’s people but also
foreign people like Chinese and Japanese. She always said that it is real pleasure
to communicate with diverse people and have positive relationships. Thanks to activities
that she took part in, she expanded human relationship and now she travels all
around world with her friends whom she met in climbing club, enjoying her life. I
think the real success of her life was made not by doing meaningless homework
but by socializing with various people.
To sum up, having a wide array of
experience and making broad human relationship is more necessary for student
than doing homework every day. In conclusion, I am highly convinced that it is
not proper to provide students with assignment every day. |
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