■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic : 무엇을 집중적으로 보완해야 할지 팁을 아려주시면 감사드립니다 ^^ |
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▶ Your Answer :
The author in
the reading passage covers three points concerning that advantages of increasing a
special tax on tobacco. The professor in
the lecture states why these are debatable.
First point made
by the listening passage, which is also of same topic, is that young people
will not stop smoking because they can buy it through black markets. Even if government increases the tax on tobacco,
teenagers are eager to buy the tobacco through the black market. Therefore, the
number of teenagers buying it will not be reduced, rather it will be dangerous
because the black markets do not check their identification. This casts doubt on the reading passage’s
assertion that raising the tax on cigarettes makes it less likely that young
people will start smoking.
Another
point made by the listening passage, which is also of same topic, describes that
the raising the tax in the tobacco is not beneficial for restoring the environment. The government does (government가 단수이므로 단수동사를 씁니다.) not use the tax for
repairing the environment, rather, planting trees and developing farmland each
year requires a new government budget.
This calls into question the reading passage’s statement that increasing
the tax will make it possible to repair damage inflicted on the environment by
the converted into farmland each year.
Finally, the
speaker in the lecture debunks that the tax getting from buying tobacco will
not be provided to poverty. The rate
of poverty will more swing than before because if government raises the tax, a
lot of jobs regarding tobacco industries will be reduced and many employees will
lose their job. As a result, the number
of poor people who need financial assistance will be increased, so it will not be
better. This contradicts the reading
passage’s claim that the revenue raised by a higher cigarette tax can be used
to reduce poverty. It will have enough
funds to support social welfare programs, which can help poor people by
providing them with financial assistance such as unemployment.
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1. introduction의 분량을 3문장 이상 늘려주세요.
2. 철자 오류가 두 곳 있습니다. 심한 감점의 요인이 될 수 있으니, 에세이 작성을 마치시고 꼼꼼히 검토해주세요.
+) 단어를 외우실 때 스펠링을 집중적으로 외워주세요.
3. reading and listening의 비율이 너무 listening쪽으로만 치우쳐져 있습니다.
비율은 5:5, 적어도 6:4 정도는 되어야 합니다.
이는 리딩에 대한 디테일 부족으로 이어지며, 분량 부족, 추가 설명 실패 등으로 이어질 수 있으니
리딩에서도 evidence를 많이 찾아서 써주시면 좋을 것 같습니다.
4. 문법에서는 주어/동사 일치에 많이 신경써주세요.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*