■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details | |
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Many teenagers consider themselves deeply whether to have a jobs for a few certain reasons while they are attending schools. I think it is not good idea because it interrupts school study, leads to a corrupted way, and it is not safe for teenagers. Therefore, I think that teenagers must be diligent toward school work; not work in a job.
Teenagers who have jobs usually get a worse grade than a grade before because working hard prevents them from doing well in schools. The reason is that they do not have enough study hours to prepare school due to spending most of hours for work. For example, my friend,who is very poor and has a part time job to support family livings, always complains about his low grade because, a year ago, he has the best grade in our class. However, after getting a job, he often fell asleep and digress an attention in class. Therefore, the low grade is a result of getting jobs.
Likewise, many teenagers are led to a bad way after getting a job because in the work place, there are many depraved adults who are poor and not intelligent. The teenagers are absolutely released to the corrupted place. For example, on the street in Korea, many teenagers who have jobs delivering pizzas smokes and drinks with adults after work with the adults in same place. Whenever I see the situation, I think it is a really serious problem in teenager society because those kinds of adults lead teenagers to the wrong way.
Moreover, a working place is not safe for teenagers because they must do hard work, such as delivering pizzas with a motorbike, or moving heavy stuff. Even, there is much news that teenagers died by crashing a car while they were delivering pizzas. I hear that such news many times. Therefore, the place is dangerous for teenagers.
For these reasons, teenagers must avoid to have jobs even though they need to earn money for livings because it is dangerous, it leads to a wrong life, and they may lose a chance to study. Also, I believe that studying hard in school will result a much better salary in the future and teenagers only have chance to succeed by only studying. Therefore, teenagers only have to study hard. | |
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