■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic : Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? We should be aware of events occurring in other countries regardless of whether they directly impact our lives. Use specific reasons and exmaples to support your opinion.
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▶ Your Answer : Some people might say that we do not need to recognize what happens in the world without the impact of the occurrences. However, in my opinion, I strongly believe that we should pay attention to other counties' events for the following two subsequent reasons.
To begin with, other countries' events can utilize crucial sources to solve similar problems. To be specific, our country is able to refer and make use of the process and method related to how to handle events they suffered from. For example, the catastrophe occurred in 2010 in rural seashores of Japan due to massive earthquakes. All of the buildings and infrastructures were deconstructed and contaminated seriously. (maybe call it a Tsunami) However, Japanese government controlled and dealt with these happenings with prepared manuals and drills including the method of escapements in order to save people from the disasters. From the lessons, our governments have introduced drills in case of the earthquakes and executed crisis management manuals on a basis of Japan's papars. (무슨 뜻인가요?) On top of that, the events occurring in (전치사 필요) other nations can have a significant influence on different countries. To explain, the problems inducing foreign countries have a connection of the whole world, especially economic aspects. For instance, the economic crisis happened in the United States in 2008. A myriad of people and estates companies went bankrupt due to a huge amount of debts that they could not pay back. The impacts influenced other countries such as Korea, Japan and other trading nations. Therefore, the others had had a hard time to recover their economy as well as the United States.
In conclusion, taking precious examples to be learned and the correlation with each other into consideration, I firmly believe that we should focus on other countries' events with a keen interest.
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2. introduction과 conclusion의 분량을 3문장 이상으로 늘려주세요.
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