▶ Your Answer : The reading passage contends that Anthropologists have been trying to determine what the cause of this rapid disintegration was, and they have come up with suggests several satisfactory explanations on the collapse of Hohokam civilization. 주제 내용 다시 확인해주세요. '인류학자들이 빠른 붕괴의 원인을 찾으려고 노력해왔다'라는 점은 reading의 핵심 입장이 아닙니다. On the other hand, the lecturer brings up several explanations that contradict this argument. First of all, the lecturer points that the Hohokam people were not forced to relocate because of devastating floods in the region. This is attributed to the fact that researchers have determined that the area experienced severe flooding prior to the disappearance of the Hohokam, but they could can be recovered. 내용 더 간단하게 줄여주세요. 맥락상 이전에도 비슷한 홍수가 있었지만 빠르게 복구한 것을 보면 홍수가 이주를 부추긴 원인은 아닐 것이다, 정도로 보이는데, 지문 내용 확인해보시고 핵심 내용만 남겨서 간추려주세요. This refutes the author's point that to relocate forced the Hohokam people relocated due to devastating floods in the region. Moreover, in the lecture, the point is made that the Hohokam society did not collapse due to an epidemic. It is true that the extensive irrigation canals constructed by the Hohokam could have transported waterborne diseases from village to village, and people had been killed by diseases, but they disappeared in area after that time. 이 부분도 더 간단하게 줄여볼 수 있을 것 같아요. This casts doubt on the idea in the reading passage that Hohokam society collapsed because of a deadly epidemic. The final point made by the lecturer is that the Hohokam civilization did not disintegrate because of internal conflict. It is obvious that oral histories of the Pima Indians teach that the Hohokam people relocated against their leaders, but there is no evidence to make this people reliable. 이 내용이 reading의 어떤 주장에 대한 반박인지 내용 보완해주세요. While both the reading passage and the lecturer deal with the Hohokam civilization's collapse, the lecturer effectively opposes all of the specific points presented in the reading. 글의 결론 문단은 글의 내용을 간단히 요약하는 역할을 합니다. 통합형 답안은 그 자체로 요약문이므로 결론 문단이 불필요합니다.
Comment : 핵심 내용이 정확하게 정리되지 않은 부분들이 많습니다. 실제 지문을 다시 검토해보시고 가장 중요한 요소들만을 남겨서 간결한 요약문이 될 수 있도록 더 정돈이 필요해 보입니다. '어떤 근거로 반박하는지' 위주로 내용을 검토해주시면 좋을 것 같아요. 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Integrated Writing Rubrics Score 3/5 A response at this level contains some important information from the lecture and conveys some relevant connection to the reading, but it is marked by one or more of the following : - Although the overall response is definitely oriented to the task, it conveys only vague, global, unclear, or somewhat imprecise connection of the points made in the lecture to points made in the reading. - The response may omit one major key point made in the lecture. - Some key points made in the lecture or the reading, or connections between the two, may be incomplete, inaccurate, or imprecise. - Errors of usage and/or grammar may be more frequent or may result in noticeably vague expressions or obscured meanings in conveying ideas and connections. |