It is of great worth to discuss whether or not
working only three days a week for long hours is more satisfying than working
five days a week for shorter hours. While some people might agree with the
statement, others might disagree with it. As far as I am concerned, I agree
with the notion that it is better to have a job where people work only three
days a week for long hours for the following reasons.
First of all, going to the office for five days
is stressful regardless of working hour. This is mainly because they should be
aware of their appearance and take a cars or the transportation to get to the office. As a
result, they will feel like the procedure before reaching the work place is a
waste of time and become unhappy in work. In fact, stress is one of the primary
factors of illness through weakening the immune system. Thus, people are more
likely to be mentally and physically weak. A few weeks ago, I had a chance to
read an op-ed piece that was related to the topic. It described the result of a
survey conducted by Seoul National University. In the survey, 43 percent of all
adults suffer adverse health effects from stress related to going to the work.
Additionally, 75 percent of all doctor’s office visits are for stress-related
ailments and disorders. Interestingly, researchers found a relationship between
the stress and human diseases such as headaches, high blood pressure, and
insomnia.
Moreover, working only three days for long hours
positively affects people’s mental health. The
important reason is that if people work only three days, although they should
work for long hours, they can finish their work intensively with concentration
on their work. After work days, they can enjoy a variety of activities ranging
from travel to other country to playing virtual reality games with friends.
Thus, this is a better way to escape from the harsh reality. For example, my
cousin was exhausted and stressed out due to demanding assignment in work.
Therefore, he traveled around Europe during his day off. By enjoying various
cultural things as music, food, and clothing. He had a brief moment of relief
from his stressful work. This is because he talked with native people and
watched traditional performance. Had he not been
there, he would have been depressed.
To sum up, working only
three days a week for a long hours is a more content way in terms of reliving
stress caused by the process of attending the work and maintaining mental
health. For these reasons, I agree with the notion that people should work
where they work only three days a week instead of where they work five days a
week for shorter hours.
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