▶ Your Answer : Some people take it for granted that teachers are now appreciated and respected by our society than they were in the past. However, contrary in contrast to this notion, it is evident that teachers are more easily neglected by our society nowadays. The rationale behind this is that appearing Internet lecture the accessibility of internet lecture and increase of the right in the human right of students makes them more difficult hinders them to become respected.
To begin with, innovative lectures like such as Internet lectures play an important role in decreasing the right of teachers. This is mainly because a lot of famous lecturers easily teach students through the way of media. However, although teachers who teaches teach in school have a hard time to catch famous lecturer's methods, most students neglect their teacher. Consequently, both teachers and students do not trust each other. For example, my mom, susie, who is now a teacher, was appreciated by her students because of her teaching skill and good relationship. However, advent of Internet made her students study by from Internet lecture. This was because merits of Internet lecture such as easy access and repeatable lecture had an effect on student's life. Therefore, teachers are not appreciated and valued nowadays.
Furthermore, increase of in the right of students affects teacher's life. This is the due to the fact that, unlike nowadays, teachers had a great deal of power to handle their students. With sophisticated society, many accidents occurs occur at school. Because of these accidents, parents have concerned about their children's school life. Through these concerns, our governments have regulated teacher's right. Consequently, regulations as to teachers decrease their right. For instance, my friend who has worked for 3 years have has a hard time to control students. And he occasionally was neglected by his students. The reasons was were that new reinforced rules that is are favorable for students had a negative effect on controlling students. Therefore, he was not confident and exhausted by decreased value of their job. Moreover, he recently left his work for searching to search for his ego. If teachers were appreciated by our society, he would have not left his job.
In both, opponents and proponents have debated over this disputable issue and both sides seem to have good reasons to support their arguments. Nevertheless, from my perspective, I would be confident that teachers were more appreciated and valued by many people in the past than nowadays, concerning that people and our society should pay attention to this issue. Good: 24~30 점수: 27 일단 문법적인 부분에 있어서 가장 신경을 써야하는 것이 동사 원형입니다. 지금 이 에세이 같은 경우에는 단수 복수 명사 뒤에 전혀 상반되는 동사 형태를 서술하고 있습니다. 제가 첨삭하는 것을 보시고 이 부분을 주의하시면서 에세이를 서술하시길 바랍니다. 이러한 문법적 오류 이외에는 아주 잘 서술된 독립형 에세이입니다. 각 단락들이 간결하게 본인의 주장을 잘 나타내고 있습니다. 수고많으셧습니다. |