문제는 찬성이냐 반대냐? Grade (marks) encourage people to learn. -318단어썼습니다.
서론 본론 구조 식상한거 압니다.ㅠ 하지만 지금으로선 그실력밖에 안되요.
일단 본론 내용 채우는 연습하고 여력이 되면 서론 본론 제스타일만드는 연습할께요.
내용의 풍부성같은것좀 봐주세요.
예상점수도 good fair limited 골라주세요 >-<
It is debatable whether the grade makes people encouraged to learn or not. I firmly believe that students are encouraged to learn from Grades, although some people district that fact. There are two primary reasons why I support that opinion. One is that it makes students to compete against others. The other is that people can fight themselves to improve the grades.
To begin with, it is needless to say that people work harder when they are on the competition. As far as I am concerned, grade is the best way to know how much the student did well and how much the student is far from the rival. Researcher has found the fact that person who knows how big gap he/she has between he/she and the rival can concentrate and work better to catch up. As for me, I was a swimmer in high school. When I had taken part in the race, I was always beaten by only 0.5 seconds with my friend. After I got the report of grade, I practiced swimming hard to decrease the gap between the rival.
Secondly, grade allows students to study harder to improve the score. From my experience, I have got only 70 percentages on Physical Science classes. Then I was really depressed on myself and it encourages me to study more to get higher score. There is another example supporting that reasons. Statistic shows that 80% of people who improved their grades said that they have shocked on their low grades before. The shocking made the persons to get motivation to work or study.
To sum up, I strongly support to the opinion that grades marks encourage students to learn. It is not only because grades enable people to work hard to decrease the gap between him/her and the rival, but also because people tend to study or work hard when they know their own score.