■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic :some would prefer to start working on a presentation as soon as it is assigned. other people would rather wait until they have the perfect idea for it. which do you prefer?
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▶ Your Answer : It is debatable whether starting working on a presentation as soon as it is assigned or waiting until I have the perfect idea for is better than one another. It is an intriguing question because opinions concerning the topic can be different relying on individual's perspectives. In my opinion, however, I prefer to start working on a presentation as soon as it is assigned.Starting working on a presentation as soon as it is assigned gives me more time to prepare for a presentation. First of all, starting working on a presentation as soon as it is assigned gives me opportunities to prepare the presentation more deliberately and elaborately. As modern society is becoming more competitive, today's world requires high quality of reports and assignments invested for long periods of time. By starting in advance as soon as it is assigned, I can search more specific and meaningful resources and information included the presentation. By doing so, my presentation is more competitive than any other's presentation.For example, I had presentation for my major, biology. I started to prepare the presentation as professor assigned the assignment. I found the meaningful and clear image inserted my report about the topic because I had enough time to research materials. Moreover my professor complimented my assignment result because he felt that I had spent a long time doing the assignment. (퀄리티가 아니라 그냥 쏟은 시간이 길어서인건가요?) On the top of that, it is not efficient to wait until they (they는 누구인가요?) have the perfect idea for the topic. Doing nothing until they have the perfect idea for it is not helpful for me to come up with perfect idea. For example, research conducted by Seoul National University, one of the prestigious university in Korea, has shown that our brains are not likely to operate when people do nothing. To be specific, it revealed brain works more than 40 percent actively when people just draw outlines about the topic than they do not do anything. All things considered, I firmly believe that it is better for me to start working on a presentation as soon as it is assigned. It is my belief that my argument regarding this topic is delivered precisely and effectively with the reasons mentioned above. |
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1. 두 번째 paragraph가 약간 빈약한 느낌이 있습니다.
조금 더 상세히 서술해주시기 바랍니다.
(예시는 좋았습니다.)
2. 꼭 필요한 문장 성분이 빠져있거나, 필요 없는 문장성분이 들어가 있는 경우가 많습니다.
검토를 꼼꼼히 해주세요.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*