▶ Your Answer : There might be some people who believe that people in the past are happier than those nowadays. However, I personally disagree with the above idea for the following two subsequent reasons.
To begin with, people in these days can keep their physical state healthier. To be specific, medicine expertises have improved medical technology dramatically. People can have more chances to treat diseases which could not be dealt with before. For example, I will talk about my mother's experience to illustrate this point. When my mother was young, her younger brother suffered from a long-term cough. My grand parents could not find the cure no matter how hard they tried to, since there was no way to heal it by knowledge at that time. Finally, he died of, which has made my mother sad about it. However, when I was young and suffering the same cough, she got me a doctor who was specialized and I could be got over in a few days. My mother said she was happier now than before, that time she had have no ways to cure her younger brother. From this experience, I realized that modern knowledge can make people stay in better shape, which made them happier.
On top of that, it is more comfortable for people nowadays. To explain, technology has developed drastically. Technologies have created various products, which make human' humans lives more easier. People can communicate each other with their mobile phones, and also they can drive with their GPS navigator. For instance, a survey was conducted by the Korea university with 1,000 citizens as respondents to understand the consensus view of satisfaction with modern technology. The overwhelming 92% had responded that they were very pleased with it, since technology could make their everyday lifes lives more comfortable. Also they claimed that if it were not for the high-technology, they would not do most of things that they could do with a great ease now. This surveys proves that people have a positive view of technology these days.
To sum up, people can stay healthier and use technology to have make their life more convenient. In this regard, I firmly believe that people nowadays feel happier than those in past.
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