Schools should ask students to evaluate their teachers. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. |
One might have heard teenagers complaining about their teachers. How much he or she scolds them for not doing well in class and often about their punishments. Some of them even say that those teachers do not deserve to teach students. Students often only care about how nice teachers treat them, but that is not important. They need to know how to control students, and also the quality of their lessons is important. I think that the evaluation of the teachers should not be done by students. -Well done. You have approached to your thesis statement in an effective way.. Also, a clear thesis statement is properly located at the end of the paragraph- Good job! First of all, it is hard for students to criticize their teachers because they cannot think objectively. When evaluating, it is important to see only the facts and how the teacher’s behavior toward students *(will) is to be eliminated* affect them. However, when students are told to evaluate a teacher, they will probably remember all of the punishments he or she gave to them. Therefore, it may lead to serious consequences due to lack of consideration since they tend to write what they feel (Then, without realizing that it may lead to serious consequences, they tend to write what they feel.) Some consider teachers who give punishments as inferior teachers (not good) while teachers who are fun and loud (humorous or have a sense of humor) are the best teachers. I believe that students are too young to evaluate in consideration of the facts(based only on the facts.) Also, most of the students often do not know about the qualities of a good teacher. A teacher who is best qualified for the job should know how to control students. They should also know how to love but also how to punish students when needed. The quality of his or her lessons is important too. They should also know how to set (고칠려다가 내용이 안 이어져서 나둡니다.) a good model to students, such as no swearing, no smoking, and no drinking alcohol. However, students do not consider those things, and therefore, I believe that teenagers lack the ability to evaluate teachers. - too many 'consider' and 'think'. I want you to be stronger as if you are actually tell the truth, not your personal opinion. To summarize, I disagree with the idea that students should evaluate their teachers. Although they may know their teachers well, they do not see teachers the way they are, but they tend to judge them by their own preferences instead. All things considered, I strongly support the idea that students should not be allowed to evaluate their teachers.
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