■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic :Some people prefer to spend time with one or two close friends. Others choose to spend time with a large number of friends. Compare the advantages of each choice. Which of these two ways of spending time do you prefer? Use specific reasons to support your answer. |
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▶ Your Answer :There are different views on spending time. Some people prefer to spend their time with many friends while others do not. In my opinion, I prefer to spend my time with a lot of people. First of all, spending time with people is beneficial because it helps relive stress and restore health. To be specific, spending time with a lot of people (컴마 쓰면 안 됩니다) allows me to talk about many personal anxiety, which makes me better manage stress, maintain health, and build a quality life. Stress is the main cause of disease and dissatisfying life. Therefore, people in modern society should actively find ways to reduce stress and stay healthy. For example, when I was attending university, I received low grade credits. At that time, my intimate friends comforted me. We had a lot of talk, which as a result made (시제) me comfortable. This helped me forget about stressful aspects in my daily life such as studying for exams and writing papers. Through this experience, I realized that spending time with intimate people is beneficial to relieve stress. In addition, spending time with a lot of people is also good because it helps me to learn about building relationships with others. In fact, spending time with others creates opportunity to talk with other people having diverse background, which allows me to learn how to build relationships through communicating people's thoughts and connecting to each other's feelings. Building (대소문자) relationships is a great way to develop the increasingly important social, interpersonal, and communicating skills. To illustrate, Bill Gates, who is the founder of Microsoft, has made great accomplishments in his lifetime. I read online that he was very successful because he was able to build meaningful relationships as well as networks with people. He did this by spending a lot of time with diverse people when he was young. Through this experience, he could develop his social, interpersonal, and communicating skills for successful relationships. In conclusion, I prefer to spend time with a lot of people. It is my belief that my argument has been precisely and efficiently delivered with the reasons mentioned above. |
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1. 각 문단 시작 전에 tab 버튼 눌러서 들여쓰기 해주세요.
2. conclusion의 분량을 3문장 이상으로 늘려주세요.
3. introduction의 분량을 3문장 이상으로 늘려주세요.
4. 문법에서는 시제에 항상 신경쓰면서 에세이를 서술해주세요.
5. 템플릿을 굉장히 잘 활용하시는 것 같습니다. (앞전 에세이)
하지만 너무 템플릿에 의존하시면 마이너스가 될 수도 있으니
본인의 문장을 만드는 데에도 집중해보시면 좋을 것 같습니다~!
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