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It has always been a contentious subject among
parents whether they should set strict rule for their children for their later
success in life. In my opinion, children can benefit from strict rules and grow
up to be a successful adult. There are two reasons why I think so: through such
rules, they can learn desirable lifestyle and also grow a sense of
responsibility.
First and foremost, strict rules can guide children to a good
lifestyle. To be specific, these rules can teach them how they should do things
in everyday life. Take a rule about when to get up, for example. If a child
tries to follow the rule and finally succeeds in internalizing it like one of
his everyday routines, it will stick to him like a habit that cannot
be easily broken. As a result, when he becomes an adult, he will not have
any problem about tardiness at work and become more successful in his career
than those who have trouble getting up early.
On top of that, if parents set rules and encourage their children
to follow them, the children will work hard to keep the rules. Then, through
the process, the children can learn how to keep rules and, at the same time,
realize what it is like to take responsibility in something. This is
illustrated by a survey of employers recently conducted by the National
Association of People and Career, which found that people who had strict rules
at home when they were young are more likely to work harder and finish tasks on
time than those who did not have such rules. Then, Iit is obvious that the former will climb clime up the career ladder more
quickly.
Based on the abovementioned substantiations, we can sensibly
deduce that if they are not too strict, it is better for parents to set strict
rules in order for their children to get ahead in life.
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