■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words.
■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer
▶ Topic :<It is better to have friends who are silmilar to me or friends who are different to me>
▶ Your Answer :Some people think that lt is better to have friends who are different from themselves. However, I strongly believe that it is better to have friends who are similar to me because when I'm staying with them I feel comfortable. and Let me explain why.
First of all, making friends who has alike similar personality with me reduces unnecessary fights with each others. This is because I feel cozy when I'm with them. For example, I have friends who has comparable interests, and she always know what activities I want to do. While she was listening to her favorite music, and I realized that my favorite music is same with her. So, we shared our tantamount (부적절한 단어인 것 같아요 tantamount는 보통 tantamount to로 써요) concerns. The More times we talked with each other, the more our friendships was increased. And thereafter we became best friends. Still now, we didn't fight at all and I love my school life with her.
In addition, It's truly efficient. This is because when you want to try something new, friends who has dissimilar perspective with me are more likely to dispute your decisions. In contrast, opposed classmates will support your idea and it will rise drive your passion to work more. For example exmaple, my friends that I told earlier, She always cheers me up whatever I challenge with. And it provided me to perform and to concentrate better. Finally I could get good result because of her sincere heart.
For these reasons, I think having friends who act equal behaviors with me creates positive effects and it plays an significant roles.
예상점수: fair 13~16
총평: 글이 부족한 부분이 많습니다. 문장은 직접적으로 쓰시긴 하셨으나 내용이 너무 단순하고 문법과 어법상 틀린 부분이 많아요. 문장을 시작하실때는 가급적 And로 안하시는게 좋아요, And는 주로 접속사로 사용되기 때문에 문장의 첫부분에 있는것은 별로 선호되는 위치가 아닙니다. 기본적으로 글의 논지도 부족하고 예시는 너무 빈약합니다. 같은 친구에 대해서 두번다 사용하셨는데 이러한 예시는 충분한 설명이 있다면 적합할 수 있지만 그러기에는 너무 내용이 부족합니다. 작은 부분(문법, 문자의 다양화, 더 적합한 예시등)부터 조금씩 더 노력하셔야 할 것 같아요. 수고 많으셨습니다.