▶ Your Answer : As for the assertion in the reading passage, the lecturer claims that there are ways to control the zebra mussel, and it does not cause serious threat. This casts doubt on the reading passage's statement that the invasion of it cannot be stopped, and it can be led to serious threat. To begin with, according to the lecture, ships take the fresh watter as the ballast water and empties it, which can be result in flouring of the zebra mussl. However, the ships are not required to empty out the ballast water. Instead, people can refill with sea water to make the zebra mussel die. This strongly rebuts the reading passage's suggestion that the invasion made by human transportation cis unstoppable. The second point of difference in regarding its new habitat. The lecturer argues that the zebra mussels can dominate its new habitat only in the beginning. To be specific, other fishies can find new food sources, and switch from their old food. Furthermore, actually, some bird species eat the zebra mussel. Finally, the lecturer asserts that it can have positive effect on other fishes. Specifically, the zebra mussel produces nutrients for some fishes which find food sources in the botton of the lake. As a result, it can increase the population of bottom feeding fish, whereas it decreases that of plankton eating fishes. In oppose to this arguement, the reading passage contends that zebra mussels are likely to cause a decline in the overall fish population.
점수: 23 리딩에 대한 정보가 많이 부족한 통합형 에세이입니다. 통합형 에세이에서 가장 중요한 부분을 차지하는 것은 한 주제에 대하여서 서로 다른 정보를 가지고 있는 리딩과 리스닝이 어떻게 비교하고 반박을 하는 것인지를 보는 것 인데. 지금 이 에세이 같은 경우는 각 단락에서 리딩에 대한 부분을 한 문장으로만 서술하였습니다. 한 문장으로 끝내는 것 보다는 리스닝을 좀 더 반박할 수 있는 부분들을 더 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다. |