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Undoubtedly, friends pay a significant role in people's
daily lives in many of the places where they play or work. Some people think
that it is impossible to be completely honest with your friends while others do
not. Both sides may have reasons to support their idea. If I had to answer asked, I would say being perfectly
honest to friends is not possible. There are several reasons as follows.
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To begin with,. being totally honest is
not possible in today's competitive world. People have to go through severe
competitions during whole life from school to work. It is more beneficial to
hide their weakness to succeed in life. For example, when my sister was in high
school, she did good in school that her grade was higher than her classmates
and even she was a class president. One day, she talked
to her closest friend about her worries about being overweight to obtain words
of comfort. However, her friend started to make de
fun of her and kept distance from her. In fact, her friends was jealous of her high academic performance. If she had hidden
her worries, she would not have lost her friend.
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In addition, people tend to do not talk about every thing to
others. To be specific, they are reluctant to
refer to a trauma. This is because it makes them
feel bad when they remind the negative experience. For instance, I have a very
old friend, John, and he is my best friend. I used to tell him every event I
had such as winning a math contest and getting lower grade in school. However,
recently I realized that I have never talked about my parents who got divorced.
This is because it is the saddest memory I have.
I did not hide that on purpose.
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All things considered, I strongly believe that people cannot be always honest
to friends for the reasons I mentioned above. All in all, the importance of friend
cannot be overestimated in life.
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서론 -to 부정사 는 to +동사 원형으로 씁니다. 또한, 문맥상 answer로 쓰는 것이 적절합니다.
첫번째 본문 -To begin with 다음에 . 아니고 , 입니다. -문맥상 과거이므로 talk-->talked 가 적저합니다. -to 부정사는 to+동사원형 made-->make -be jealous of 구문입니다. of 써주세요.
두번째 본문 -not talk 가 동사이므로 do 지워주세요. -be reluctant to 구문입니다. be 동사 써주세요. -철자 오류. saddest 문단별로 줄 띄어주세요. 표현, 구문, 철자 오류 많습니다. 개선해주세요. 내용적으로는 괜찮습니다.
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