▶ Your Answer : It is disputable that visiting museums is the best way to learn or not. Actually, many people are relying on art building like museums and think visiting museum is the best way to learn to learn more about life . However, in my view, visiting museums isn't the best way to learn is not best way to learn (독립형 에세이에서는 줄인말을 서술하면 안됩니다) for following two subsequent reasons.
To begin with, visiting museums require requires (ing 뒤에는 단수 동사 입니다) times and money . Most people think that most museums are free to enter and actually it is true. Nevertheless, i think it took costs public transportation expenses and times to get there. From my experience, i used to go many Korea museums to introduce my country to my foreign friend. Even all of the museums was free were (all은 복수 주어입니다), i spent a lots of money to go there because of long distance from my house. It also made me and my friend got tired physically by walking for a long times in there get tired physically (made뒤에는 동사 원형이 나와야합니다).
In addition, there are numerous ways to obtain more information than going museums. . A lots Lots of museums may have guiders to explain about antiquities but there is a limitation in learning something specifically guidance to explain the remnants but lacks in terms of learning specifically.As technology advanced, people don't need to enter museums themselves because these days have many ways to access to information by using Internet and other devices do not need to enter museums since people can find ways to learn about a country (독립형 에세이에서는 줄인말을 서술하면 안됩니다). For example, i used to study Art and English subjects by using website called ' Khan academy'.It was really comfortable and efficient for me to learn because i can use it in every space and time. Also, one of the most advantage i think from this using this site is free and i can study whenever i want.
In conclusion, Perhaps visiting museums has its advantages but i don't think it is the best way to learn somethings. Because there are various ways that doesn't require money and times.
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