■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic :Some people like to buy books to read. Others like to borrow books from libraries or from other people. Compare the advantages of these two ways of reading. Which do you prefer? Give specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 저번에 리밋 떠서 요 잘 쓴거 같은대 이유를 모르겠어요..ㅠㅜ |
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▶ It is an intriguing topic of statement because ideas can be different from individual perspectives concerning each idea. intriguing topic of statement because concerning this ideas are different from individual perspectives. Although, Some people may think buying books is more advantageous, in contrast to this idea, I prefer to borrow books from other people because it is better for following two subsequent reasons.
To begin with, Borrowing books allows me to save money. I am responsible for my college tuition, so I live on a tight budget. If I spend money on buying books, I will not be able to pay for my tuition fee. if I spent money for buying books, it will able for me to pay for my collage. And also they are able to prevent their stress for spending money, and able to concentrate more better in my study. (they 가 누군가요?) For example, My sister, when she was in high (대소문자 구분) school, she was under heavy stress arising to buy major book. arose from buying books for her major. Although (although 뒤에 컴마 쓰지 마세요.) she put constant effort to buy books, she decided to have a part-time job. However, It was not easy because she had a tight time for following her study. Fortunately, she was able to let off some steam after changing her decision to borrow major books from (전치사) graduate students. If she had not changed her decision I am sure she would have been going through a hard time studying. Second, borrowing books enables people to socialize with others. In the response relationships, the potential role of broaden relationship is to meet people with others. This is because they can communicate with other their friend. Many experts and researcher statics reinforce that the ideas who most senior executives of the key of their success was (이 앞 구절이 이해가 안 됩니다.) spending time with others who have different perspective. This is more highly regarded in the past because today’s problem are hard to be solved with their own individual talent. So there is no doubt in my mind that borrowing will be more advantageous over buying. Then (than: 비교급, then: 연결어) this will be a great advantageous on their future. In a nutshell, it (대소문자 구분 확실하게 해주세요) seems reasonable that to borrow the books and to buy is interpretation. (이건 무슨 뜻인가요??) There is no doubt in my mind that buying book is more better (good의 비교급 자체가 better 이기 때문에 앞에 more을 쓰시면 의미가 중복됩니다.) for two following because able to save money and opportunity to socilize with others
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1. 각 문단 시작 전에 tab 버튼 눌러서 들여쓰기 해주세요.
2. 철자 오류가 두 군데 있습니다.
심한 감점의 요인이 될 수 있으니, 에세이 작성을 마치시고 꼼꼼히 검토해주세요.
3. 문장과 문장 사이에 스페이스 바 치지 말아주세요.
4. 저번에 리밋이 뜨셨다고 했는데 그럴만한 이유는 내용이 아니라 문법에 있습니다.
너무 문법이 어지러워서 글이 읽히지 않습니다.
지금 에세이 쓰실 단계 아닙니다.
문장 단위로 영작 연습부터 하셔야 합니다. 아예 기본기부터 찬찬히 다지세요.
이유는 잘 고르셨지만 그걸 표현할 만한 문법이 완전히 무너진 상태라 아무리 좋은 내용을 갖다놔도
질이 떨어질 수 밖에 없습니다.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*