■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words.
■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer
▶ Topic : Some people prefer to live in places that have the same weather or climate all year long. Others like to live in areas where the weather changes several times a year. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.
▶ Your Answer :
Climate is a critical factor which affects our lives greatly affecting people's emotion. According to the temperature and weather, life forms vary. As a person living in a country where has four seasons, I love to live in places where the weather changes regularly. I personally feel this way for two main reasons, which I am going to describe in the following essay. I personally prefer to live in a country where weather changes regularly for the following two subsequent reasons.
First of all, life experience becomes more abundant in country with four season. Not anyone can swim in the sea during summer, and ride a ski during winter, without travelling abroad, but I can, because I live in a place where season changes. I once lived in the Philippines, where it is hot throughout the year. I was surprised by the fact that most of peoplehaven’t seen a did not see snow. Likewise, people living in Russia would not be able to enjoy surfing and other summer sports on their beaches. We can enjoy all of these activities, if we live in areas where the weather changes.
Secondly, many industries will be developed in the countries where the climate is not stable. We need air-conditioner to overcome extreme heat in summer, andwe need heating system for the winter. Therefore, we need factories to produce those seasonal products, stores to sell, and even a people to hire. All of these will benefit the country’s economy. Someone might think this has nothing to do with my preference of place, but I do believe this is also an important aspect, because it means that if I choose to live in a place where the weather constantly changes, it is more likely that I will be living in a country which is weather, thus can ensure its people with better quality of living.
In conclusion, I prefer to live in a place with various weather, because not only it provides me various experiences, but also it is more likely to provide me better quality of living.
First of all, life experience becomes more abundant in country with four season. Not anyone can swim in the sea during summer, and ride a ski during winter, without travelling abroad, but I can, because I live in a place where season changes. I once lived in the Philippines, where it is hot throughout the year. I was surprised by the fact that most of people
Secondly, many industries will be developed in the countries where the climate is not stable. We need air-conditioner to overcome extreme heat in summer, and
In conclusion, I prefer to live in a place with various weather, because not only it provides me various experiences, but also it is more likely to provide me better quality of living.
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