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Some people
think that increasing the price of gasoline and electricity isn't
the most effective way for the government to save energy. However, as far as I
am concerned, I firmly believe that increasing the price of gasoline and
electricity has most positive impact on conserving energy. This is because
people try not only to decrease sum of energy use but also to develop
alternatives.
First and
foremost, People would do their best in order to save their money which is used
for electricity and gasoline if the government impose more tax on that. In other
words, the decision made by the government helps people to find the way to save
energy in their house. For instance, there are extracting all plugs when they
go outside as well as using bike when they go to a short distance.
Consequently, it will make people save their energy.
Moreover,
people would develop alternatives to maintain energy. What I mean is people
would invent new technology such as nuclear power plant which has very high
energy efficiency. To be more specific, conventional power plant which have
used fossil-fuels or coals has only 30 % of conversion efficiency of
electricity from thermal energy. However, the nuclear power plant has up to 50
% of conversion efficiency. Therefore, I think people would make new way to
save energy.
To sum up,
I truly believe that the decision that the government added more tax on the
price of gasoline and electricity in order to conserve energy will make people
devote to save their usage of energy as well as develop a high-technology which
has high energy efficiency.
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