▶ Your Answer The lecturer argues that the problems pertaining fish farms could be managed. This contradicts the reading passage's points that those fish farms have some serious drawbacks.
To begin with, the lecturer says that the expected problem regarding contagious marine parasites problem which mainly results from cramped circumstances, it can be easily solved by using clear fish. Because the one small clear fish could support 50 farm fishes making comfortable environments. This counter doubt on the idea that fish farms encourage spreads of sea lice.
Next, the lecturer argues that fish farming does not diminish the stock of marine resources especially those kill and squid which is fed to the captive fish for providing protein. The fish farm try to harvest them in an efficient way, for example, they catch smaller amounts of resources so that they do not waste of it. This rebuts on the idea that fish farming leads to the depletion of ocean life by overharvesting marine resources.
Finally, the lecturer contends that the problems regarding escaping captive fish can be avoided by reintroducing land based facilities. Compare to the artificial one, the rates of fleeing fishes could be downward and fish farmers can keep them safe without harming the marine ecosystem. This counters the reading passage's idea that fish farms contributing to the tendency of captive fish to escape lead to the result of decreasing population of local fish.
점수: 22 리딩에 대한 정보가 많이 부족한 통합형 에세이입니다. 통합형 에세이에서 가장 중요한 부분을 차지하는 것은 한 주제에 대하여서 서로 다른 정보를 가지고 있는 리딩과 리스닝이 어떻게 비교하고 반박을 하는 것인지를 보는 것 입니다. 지금 이 에세이 같은 경우에 있어서는 리딩에 대한 부분을 각 단락에서 한 문장으로만 서술하였는데. 한 문장으로 끝내는 것 보다는 리스닝을 좀 더 반박할 수 있는 부분들을 더 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다. |